The Doll

Challenge from the "Writing Prompt Group". Use picture as inspiration.

Bent and broken into
the doll that you crave
slowly rotting, going insane
to a shallow grave.

Unable to cry aloud
yet able to feel tears
that try in vain
to comfort the fears.

Victorian hypocrite
and porcelain doll
waiting to be dropped
and shattered by the fall.

N. Strong

Reviews

[OMGMike]

Simply gorgeous.

Fast, descriptive, and very manipulative to the mind. I like how its fast-paced in my head when I read it as if I can see this occurrence whenever I blink in between glances. I am a bit jealous of this inspiration that you presented here.

"Bent and broken into
the doll that you crave
slowly rotting, going insane
to a shallow grave."

F**k yeah

[Aedryn_Krause]

wow...
All I can say is-intense.

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing short poem. Each line making the poem stronger and your point desired very clear. Sometime we forget to realize the special people in a life. May need TLC too. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Taylor H.]

This was a wonderful write and I saw the prompt the whole time :)

[Rapterj]

I like the duality that was shadowed and then brought out in the last stanza. Not sure if it was intended, but I almost felt like this reflected the life and personality of Lady Marie Antoinette. Great piece, very thought provoking!

[Katie Louise Hughes]

I think you did a great job with this piece! I can feel the pain in this "doll," and I love how the words you use to describe her make her come alive! The last stanza is interesting to me, because even though it has a darkness to this poem, the Victorian era makes me think of seemingly happy times. This was great, thanks and keep up the work! :D

[Annette Piazza]

Great poem. Full of imagery contained in just a few short verses. I look forward to reading more. :)
Peace, Annette.

[Dawn Jones]

Mmmm, I always feel like a doll... a puppet on a string.
Actually use that line in the new chapter of my novel... I think it's profound and pretty much relates to anyone.

I love it when you write :)
Thank you.

[Michael X]

i loved this, because the length is perfect and the powerful meaning catches
the reader off guard. its so poeticlly defined in its features. Dark and yet
reflective, a metaphor for the heart. there are many ways to look at this.
awsome imagery. keep up the great work.

[the in between]

Very well written :D

my favorite part:


Unable to cry aloud
yet able to feel tears
that try in vain
to comfort the fears.