This Raw Beauty

Poem I had written on the back of a receipt.

Raw beauty of lost love,
of emotion that no one sees.
Pain that is hidden by
various degrees.

My raw beauty hides
my gentle empathy
only to reveal the actress
in mild apathy.

Raw beauty of a
diamond in the rough,
Looking so ordinary
yet always so tough.


N. Strong

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

Hey, I liked the rhythm to this; you did a great job with the rhyming structure, it wasn't cheesy and instead ripples up against the brain like an insistent ocean tide. Nice. I think a lot of people can relate to the external poise ve. inner weaknesses issue. Overall, a good write - and it's nice to meet someone else who writes poems on the back of receipts. Whatever's closest to hand, right?

Don't know if I returned your review from ages ago [of my poem 'Bad Taste'] but if not, my apologies for taking so long to get here.

[misha]

Wow, great job. I really liked this piece

[Tommy]

Wow, I like the raw beauty of this piece! To look at love lost as inspiration is so so real for me; I don't think I would love to write now if it were not for this inspiration which sparked my expressions.

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Dawn Jones]

Very well played.

I like the way you wrote this... it's simple, but not... if that makes any sense.

As, nearly, always it suits my emotional state quite well. ;)