Heaven's Tears

free write

a music is filling the earth once more
a moment in time that I long for
the feeling of a planet sharing
emotions with me
the sky has turned from blue
to deep grays of stormed emotions
finally, the sky cannot hold
her tears a moment longer
and sighs heavily.

cool rain drops caress my face
and calm my anger, reminding me
that even the cosmos need a release.
my heart is dark and breaking and
it seems the world knows this,
crying with me so I don't feel alone.

the city is breathing with me
feeling the cool sensation of rain
as it washes away the filth of so many sins.
my arms raise skyward as the drops wash
over scars and marks,
purifying me.

I'm crying with the skies, with the heavens.
Only in the moments of heavenly pain
can I feel truly understood.
Even God is weeping, for one... for many.

N. Strong

Author's Note

This was a free write and as such the form is lacking, along with the lack of punctuation and capitalization.

Reviews

[Verdant Cynic]

This represents what I feel a lot. A lot of times, during some lonely nights, I find some sense of divine empathy. In these moments, I feel like my loneliness is justified. This poem reminds me of those moments.

I like it. One suggestion I have:

"cool rain drops caress my face
and cool my anger, reminding me"

Maybe find another word for cool in the second line, like "douse". It would give it a bigger effect than using cool twice, IMO.

[Nyida Strong]

Thank you for the suggestion. I hadn't noticed the doubt use of "cool". I've exchanged it for "calm" instead. This was a free write and I didn't do much to it with the exception of adding punctuation.

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

I like this one , continue to write in that style you are doing that great :) Yos

[r]

strong piece

[misha]

Great job, I really like it.

[shylaloral]

This is seriously the best poem you have ever written. My friend, I am so proud of you! You're doing great, you poetry and stories are really advancing. I love you, hun1 Keep skribbling.

[Tate Morgan]

This speaks to me