Lost

super shorty

My pulse will freeze when my pure heart leaks

My lonely soul will bleach when my doom has reached

Devil will feast upon my flash and meat

Details are bleak then I suffocate in grief

Promises I could not keep and life is not sweet

So I seek inside my own nothingness that will never leave

 

Nyi

( 23.8.2010 )

 

 

 

Author's Note

I set the time for 20 min and started writing. I stopped when the time was up and this was the result of it. As raw as it could get, I do hope that the rhymes are not too forced and this poem would have a strong meaning to it...appreciate the comments..thanks

Reviews

[Prateeksha Khot]

AWESOMEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

[Coyote Poetry]

Avery strong 20 minute poem. I take hours and thinking today to write. I like the feel and struggle in the poem. Life can seem bleak sometime. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Rory CJ Frankson]

Gritty an bleak, those deals to seek... an man, on ah stop watch.
The deal crumbles. Too cool to fool ya, man think cruel.
Blinding that void, reached destroyed.
d-Dig it the rhyme time, stands. That edge.
Right on the precipise. With a premise, an no promise.
To follow.

Deservse a word rap, return... in a wrap. Around, round down.
Wear, the crown. nyi
The thorny deals running the clock, Doc.
Demons laugh --- an Angels weep.

Neat... I feel that seep. Cool.... Write On / Right On! Ro.
Peace, if ya find some?
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