Biological Defeat

Status of my health is in dire peril

For Illness is sucking out my spirit of a rebel

It creeps inside my body like a worm

I’m lacking vitality which I could not loan

Becoming more and more prone to fatigue

Feeling weak like I’d been run over by a rampage

Dizziness projects confusion inside my mind

Medication is a another form of disguised lie

I feel like my life is cheap

For my sheer wall of resistance has a breach

Vacuum is the nature of my personality

For a sound sleep is a fleething luxury

Piece by piece, it is tearing apart my life

Everything that I have achieved will be lost in this single fight

Heap of regret is pilling beside me

No matter how proposterous, it is real

My daily routine is now the ultimate survival

As time and youth cannot be recycled

 

Nyi

( 5.8.10 )

 

 

Author's Note

Wrote this little piece when I was sick...please leave some comments...

Reviews

[Joshua Donahue]

well-written. you touch the symptoms well! i like it!

[Aussie]

OW! This sucks,because I feel this way on a daily basis and I have to fight it.It struck a very personal chord with me,reopened some very old wounds and honestly brought tears to my eyes.Its a very emotional piece,well written with such a precise tone to it...I liked it a lot,despite the feelings its stirred up in me.

My favorite line was this : 'I feel like my life is cheap'. This struck me hard because I myself have actually said these words out loud,in a much harsher way.

Brilliant,honest,heartwrenching piece.Astounding work :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

When I was 11 yrs old I had a really bad fever. This is exactly how I felt as everything began to glow and fade away. When my vision came back I was stretched out on a bed in the nurse's office. You really captured the experience of teetering on the edge of life and death...spot on!

[Coyote Poetry]

Being sick leave our mind to wander. I was real sick a month ago. Felt like death was near. Made my mind think about the important things. I like your poem. I don't like pills or medicine. The poem is very good. Your description was amazing of the feel of being sick.
Coyote

[Prateeksha Khot]

it is really good. keep ti up!