Pond Skating

Pond Skating

I sit on the frozen bench

Tighten the laces

Pushing off, the steel blades dig in

I glide over the ice

Moving faster

 

The air is clean and frigid

The sun is high but offers no comfort

A brave Crow caws in the distance

I glide over the ice

Moving faster

 

The breeze cuts as it passes

Nose and ears are numb

Skin on my face is tight and prickly

I glide over the ice

Moving faster

 

I stop suddenly

Snow sprays ahead of me

Almost silent

Faint cracks in the ice below

Tree Branches crackle above

 

Take in a deep breath

Bitter air burns my lungs

Pushing off, the steel blades dig in

I glide over the ice

Moving faster

 

Muscles warming

Perspiration building

Mind is clearing

I glide over the ice

Moving faster

 

I sprint the perimeter

Pushing my limits

Gasping for a breath

I glide over the ice

Moving slower

Reviews

[audrie]

Take in a deep breath
Bitter air burns my lungs - enjoyed these lines in particular -
and also these-
I stop suddenly
Snow sprays ahead of me
Almost silent
Faint cracks in the ice below
Tree Branches crackle above
you paint a very vivid picture - nice work

[❀ Gabriela ..]

I absolutely love the imagery you use! I could perfectly picture this scene in my head, and that last stanza just ties it all together beautifully. Very well done! :)

[nseddy]

Thank you!!

[Bowers]

great, awesome, wonderful! I love it! I love the repetition of those two lines, this piece had lovely imagery, very fun to read! :D good job!

[nseddy]

Thank you so much!

[Sami Khalil]

That should be fun, fun and fun. A splendid poem...:)..................

[nseddy]

Thanks for the kind words Sami, yes it is indeed FUN.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....................