That Girl

Those eyes that were always smiling

Have begun to lose their luster

Now those few sparkles there

Are the best she can muster

Even those are being sucked out

And I watch as her mask falters

Because the laughter is forced

And her true smile has been altered

Those specks of happiness in her eyes

Have all turned to gray

The beauty of the color

Has begun to quickly fade

Tension and stress attack her

And she is helpless to fight

The lines that have now appeared

Show how she gave all her might

Her body is a battle ground

Her brain the main clash

Her hearts been torn to pieces

And her life’s been turn to ash

But now the fire within her

Has begun to burn out

The hope she held close

Has been turned to doubt

Reviews

[TheLemon&Me]

lovely theme - I really enjoyed it :D

[Livin'todieCS]

Wow. This poem for me perfectly epitomizes the times where we feel like s**t but have got to put on a fake smile to walk out the door, and how doing that, over time, takes so much out of us. Wearing that mask can really suck us dry. What I love about this poem is also the 'watcher' feel that writing in the third person brings. You sense that whoever's sharing this really understands the girl and knows her true self. You get the feeling that this girl is really suffering, and she's trying really hard to keep the mask on--whatever her reason might be--maybe to make others happy, maybe because she's trying to be a 'good girl', or maybe she thinks that by letting herself feel others will be upset? But that thing inside of her that's hurting is beginning to cut through her mask, and that's something that's so sad to witness, especially if you care about someone.

This poem is so well written!!