Red: Currents

I got caught, by a photo look'n me in the eye.
Pull'n me in, pulling me out of the straight line.
Where in dark nights romance is sold out and off.
I got caught up in, probability of time again.
Cause I'm seeing too much in the outline.

So looked her in the eye an' said.
"Don't you go spitting in my face.
Like you don't bleed when you cry.
Make'n my words seem cheap."
And in the sunset I explained how we've melted.
How I saw the beauty of the death of Tuesday.
But today I don't complain.

Cause I know...
It's just my blurred vision, it's just natural.
For you to confuse the two, and choke up.
It's just a hard decision, it's just not right.
For you to wake up at night, throwing up.

With a cold voice I commanded what's mine an' said.
"Don't just give it to me, I wanna feel it burn.
A hole in my sleeve and into the sheets of skin.
So I know, that I'm doing it to you."
Let'n me know it's come'n in, love's flood'n in.
But little did I know I wasn't sleeping.

Cause I know...
It's just my blurred vision, it's just natural.
For you to confuse the two, and choke up.
It's just a hard decision, it's just not right.
For you to wake up at night, throwing up.

So looked her in the eye an' said.
"Don't you go spitting in my face.
Like you don't bleed when you cry.
Make'n my words seem cheap."
And in the sunset I explained how we've melted.
How I saw the beauty of the death of Tuesday.
But today I don't complain.
Cause I know...
It's just my blurred vision, it's just natural.
For you to confuse the two, and choke up.
It's just a hard decision, it's just not right.
For you to wake up at night, throwing up.

Reviews

[Molly D]

I'm sure your punctuation is intentional (all the placements of your periods and commas), but it only serves to impede my reading of the poem. Some of them make sense, and then some of them just confuse me or force me to stop a sentence that should flow, and it takes me out of reading the work and instead contemplating the style choice.