Red alarm.

Do I need an introduction to begin?
As I punch. The clutch. Nothing happens.
It's seen the disease is pleased again.
Seen falling through the dreams end.
As I punch. The clutch. Nothing happens.

Red alarm, wake up the sorrow.
A great loss is sure to follow.
The sounding of sirens and faces hollow.
Because the light was stolen, no sun tomorrow.

I thought I had it right last night.
Completely ill. Don't touch. Believe her.
It's got to be better than this stunning address.
Seen falling through the dreams end.
As I punch. The clutch. It sets in.

Do you believe in science?

Cause there is more to living than empty holes.
Populate the spy with a naked eye.
Unnatural alternative solution.
Poison burrow, the flowers soul.

What taste so scarce?
Is it that there's a glitch.
In the timing of precision.
The delayed decision.
The slip.
Well here it is.
The product of the remainders difference.
Their failure to abort breaths.
Now it's my turn.

Red alarm, wake up the sorrow.
A great loss is sure to follow.
The sounding of sirens and faces hollow.
The light of tomorrow was stolen, no sun.
Cause there is more to living than empty holes.
Populate the spy with a naked eye.
Unnatural alternative solution.
Now it's my turn to show you the burn.

As I punch. The clutch. Nothing happens.
As I punch. The clutch. Nothing happens.
As I punch. The clutch. Nothing happens.
As I punch. The clutch. Nothing happens.

Reviews

[Gary H]

I'm not having a good day with words that rhyme today. Been reading too many easy ones and I feel your first four follow that line - sorrow, follow, hollow and tomorrow. Fortunately this is preceded by some interesting thoughts then after some clever interlacing of previous parts that build to a climax. I like the way you write. There's definately a lot of resonance. What might be useful though is to tell the reader what you were thinking at the end in the Authors notes. Whilst this might not seem essential to you, I think that our understanding of where you are coming from would be greatly enchanced. Good work once again.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Sorry it took so long for me to review this. Nicely written though, I was a a little concerned about a few things, but it all seemed to flow nicely together into a masterpiece. Exquisite write.

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Wow this is an amazing piece!!
I am very impressed!! =]
The ryhming flows perfectly & it doesn't seem forced!!
It's great as a poem & it could be used as song lyrics!!!

[Wildfleour]

Lee - I found this to be very interesting and one of my favorites of yours. It almost sounds like it could be a song, with the repetition you built in for effect.

There is much to contemplate here. I sense a tremendous amount of futility and loss.

[Lydia]

I really enjoy your rhyme schemes, the half-rhymes and assonances really work for me. This piece has a lot of mystery, and having to look past the surface of your words is a welcome change of a challenge.