Serpent clock.

Serpent is this time well spent, slithering towards the hole?
To hide again, waiting for prey to walk where you can stalk.

So lets close the curtains and talk.
I have many things to assault.
All of which you default, to not know.

What is about such sharp words that you find unattractive.
Is it the fact I caught you in the acts before and while standing in.
Pretending to smile, to your self.
Pretending to be happy.
Pretending to heal, while you can.
But it's too ugly, when you standing in the mirror.

You desert me.
But from time to time.
You mock me.
With phone calls, from no where.
No where you want to be.

Such an ugly scene for you, an injury you won't make it through.
It looks like you slipped and fell into a guillotine. (Roped you in.)

But no you're not beggin to get out.
Its the drug you can't do without.
A shot for the mouth. To weaken you.
But no you're not working it out.
Lick stick and plunge, the needle in.
It what keeps you. Sleeping with sin.

Pretending to smile, to your self.
Pretending to be happy.
Pretending to heal, while you can.
But it's too ugly, when you standing in the mirror.

Look in the mess, toiled with razor wire and metal with fire.
Where the medicine is of dead tissue, consume and be new.
Looking every day, eating the part of you, that you just threw up.

But no you're not beggin to get out.
Self destruction you could do without.
A shot in the mouth. To weaken you.
To numb to speak, it'll have its way with me.

A pawn now forever she'll keep.
Once a beautiful boy, now doesn't speak.
One who used to not be so weak.
Now with out his anesthetic he is weak.
Without her poison he is bleak.

It must have been her new victim this week.
Serpent this time you robbed from the innocent.
Slithering to seduce and introduce....
The poison on (to) (his) your lips.

Reviews

[Natalie C]

Ha welcome back Lee, this is the type of piece that I was expecting from you. Very clever using the serpent as a metaphor for the "demon" woman herself. Loved how you played with the emotions here, just gave the piece a little extra 'spunk"

I really loved;

"A pawn now forever she'll keep.
Once a beautiful boy, now doesn't speak.
One who used to not be so weak.
Now with out his anesthetic he is weak.
Without her poison he is bleak."

Just shows how addictive someone can actually be, even if we know it isn't what is best for us.

Nice piece, really enjoyed it!

[Steffi]

Another very vivid and outstanding piece. I really enjoyed the metephor of the snake throughout the piece. I felt that you didn't get stuck behind your metaphor, as most writers do, and you used it to really enhance your writing.
Nice piece :D

[Gary H]

I'm fascinated by another piece that uses time but in a completely different way. This appears to be the fallibilty of the heart as it beats for someone but knows as the clock ticks it will never reach closer than it has. Maybe this is part of a self destruction and is repeated time and time again - the weakness being a happiness that pretends to exist because this has to happen, yet the conclusion is a life eaten up in poison.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

This was an interesting, yet intriguing read. Very clever piece. Great Write.