Memorable acidity.

I passed away, in a fortress of broken glass.
Intriguing signals flashing, asking me to come back.
But I can't move, the jagged edges all point.

They point at me...

To clues leading the play on stage. The characters are all familiar, in an eery way.
Sounds all sounding the same, asking...

Questions inside your mind, are you left behind?
To turn blue and die. This fate for you.
Sadly all of the clues, they point at me...

If you care to listen, I might have insults for you.
Addressed back to the sender, and built to cut.
They are in mint condition so try to be careful.

Try not to, break the corners.
Try not to, blur with liquid.
Try not to, condemn the rest of us.

The way you did with jagged glass.
All pointing at me, moving in closer.
Nothing gets in or out, no one will know.



I passed away, in a fortress of broken glass.

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

this is ... pretty intense, my dear. i am unsure whether i got any real 'meaning' from it... but it didn't really matter to me whether i did or not. overall, it definitely gave me a 'feeling' though, which was really powerful.

'Sadly all of the clues, they point at me... "

i liked this, and the vague repetition of this sentiment.
it made me think of false accusations, and ... being unsure, of even our own innocence, in any situation in life.

well done... i liked the way you set it up, and the overall flowof the piece

[Natalie C]

Pretty damn intense to say the least. I am thinking I am getting the hang of your pieces and how you think.
Really loved the metaphors you used to describe a broken life, the glass was so fitting

[Star-Runner]

Very well written like the way you used jaded glass in your write, very well written.

[♥ Courtney &hear..]

I loved it. It was very intense and dark if you ask me. It flowed well and i got a great mental picture. :) great job. Keep up the writing its awesome