Untitled Poems

A poem I wrote for a contest :) Hope you like it :)

One day a child was bored by the rain,

Already her clothes filled with mud stains.

Her bike was rusted, 

The computer had been exhausted.

Her parents could stand it no more

And made her do a chore

But still the complaining continued

Her whining only renewed

So they sent her upstairs

With a couple of pears

To find something to read

Hopeful to succeed 

This war against boredom fit.

She found a place to sit

By a book filled of poems,
What was in them no one really knows.
She opened it and was startled
To find them all untitled.
But she red a few words
Creating apparitions of swords!
With a few more rhymes
She managed to freeze time!
But only for a little spell
(After she'd raided the wishing well).
The air chilled with a spoken line
Another made a grape vine.
Ecstatic the girl raced downstairs.
Fire singed her hair.
"Mommy, daddy!" come look
With excitement her body shook.
Now the whole world's startled,
From a bunch of poems still yet untitled.

Author's Note

Hope you enjoy it :) Please review.

Reviews

[Farrsight]

I did not know what to think of it, seeing the title, but I really like how it turned out!

[LunarSong]

Thank you, it was for a contest and the title had to do with Untitled.

[Farrsight]

That makes sense now.

[LunarSong]

Yep, and really that's the whole reason it exists ;)

[Farrsight]

You said it!

[Starscraper]

I want that book! Where can I find it? hahahah Great job I enjoyed this one.

[LunarSong]

Thank you :) I'll tell you were you can find the book as soon as I find it ;)

[Starscraper]

Great! Let me know.

[LunarSong]

I will ;) ;)

[Hinoto]

wow interesting poem. quite a unique one. nicely done.

[LunarSong]

Thank you :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Amazing , the tone if you speed read it sounds like a riddle, but if you pause and reread it, then the ritual in the message is very clear. Great poetry, definitely for a con test.

[LunarSong]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write ...Thank you for posting...:)

[LunarSong]

Thank you :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Night]

'Now the whole world's startled, from a bunch of poems still yet untitled.'
I love this line!

[LunarSong]

Thanks :) glad you like it.

[Calibaster]

This is amazing, and probably one of my favorites! I mean, at some parts it was rather sketchy, but hey! C'est la vie, right? :) ;)

[LunarSong]

Yep, well I did write it in like only five minutes, so I'd imagine it's a little sketchy at points :) You really do love adding in things in French :p

[Calibaster]

oui! :)

[LunarSong]

oui :)

[Calibaster]

;)

[Jazz Newport Green]

"This war against boredom fit.She found a place to sit by a book filled of poems. "
Try this:
"This war against boredom fit. By a book filled of poems, She found a place to sit"
It makes the rhyme a little more noticeable, instead of having the two words back-to-back.

Also, you wrote "But she red a few words" I think you meant 'read'. Other than that, I like this poem, as it is the story of my life. Thank you for the good work, keep it up!! : )

[LunarSong]

Thanks for you're review, I'll change red to read :) I love you're suggestion, but I had all my rhymes back to back for this poem and I don't know how well it would work if I changed just one. Thanks :)