Melanie's Mornings

At 5:00 a.m. you wouldn’t expect so many people to be out yet the streets of the city are bustling and lively. People on phones, carrying briefcases and suitcases, and walking dogs all elbow past each other eager to get where they’re going. No one takes the time to stop and notice the brilliant gold, orange, and red leaves that fly in the fall breeze. At least almost no one notices.

Standing in front of a tall oak tree is a woman. She wears a blue dress with black leggings and a name-tag that reads “Melanie”: the uniform for her job at Doug’s Diner. Her red, curly hair cascades down her back and dances in the wind. She is staring up through the branches of the oak tree, catching glimpses of the sunrise that matches the colors of the leaves falling around her.

Melanie always stops by this tree after late night or early morning shifts at the diner. She loves working there, greeting all her regulars and easily making friends with new customers. She loves the non-stop motion of the job, the feeling that there is always something that needs to be done. But still, every time she steps out of the diner she feels the need to release a sigh, to settle herself, and the grand oak tree enables her to do just that.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Interesting & vivid character portrait in words. You start out showing the overall scene, then your camera hones in on this everyday person. Such a glimpse into Melanie's mornings gives the reader a suggestion that even our littlest & most ordinary details of life can be written into a colorful & interesting vignette.

[Samuel Dickens]

A lovely image, this Melanie who routinely unplugs from daily life and admires nature's beauty. It refreshes her, I think. All should appreciate the awesome displays our planet provides. Very good writing, Mae.

[mae23]

Thank you very much!

[Dave]

I love the picture you paint with your descriptive words. However, I think I and perhaps many others would like to hear more about Melanie.

I also write short, well not so short stories such as
The Dance or Sand Castles.

[Tony Jordan]

In Ireland farmers were loath o cut down trees to make way for crops for the felt the tree had a spirit - the current leader of the IRA, Gerry Adams is a well-known 'tree-hugger'.
I like this affinity between woman and nature.

[mae23]

Very interesting and thank you

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good story written. I liked the use of nature to help her gather her senses. Good description made people and location come alive for the reader. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the amazing story.
Coyote

[mae23]

Thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Anjali]

A good one. It seems pretty simple but it's not. And it's the piece's best quality! Admired it a lot!

[mae23]

Thank you, and yes I am a bit worried about the simplicity and shortness but you think it works well?

[Anjali]

Yes absolutely! It's perfect the way it is. I don't know what other people might think, but in my opinion, I love it's simplicity and shortness very much!

[mae23]

Thank you so much! :)

[Anjali]

You are very welcome!

[Mr.Writer]

A calm, well written story, with beautiful imagery on the trees, and the insight on Melanie's mornings at the diner!
I really liked it, well done, keep it up!

[mae23]

Thank you!

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)