Harmonious Months

The demands of life are really tiring, but never stop dreaming anyway <3

Can't wait for the months to get harmonious

and watch the wavelengths of this flow

set up to my standard of desire

 

Life won't stop to notice anyone, I know

and I'm just another anyone...

 

neither will the world forge itself to satisfy me

 

But,

there are plenty of dreams I've bottled,

hoping to see them floating in the future

 

I see vivid shades of my youth in the

dreams I keep on painting

 

the simplest joys of my existence;

in the plans I have made-up

 

and kept - packed;

to be embraced by my future days

 

these stashed wishes

got my brain wired up

as they keep buzzing endlessly

 

I'm just sick of switching sentiments

and my mind has got a lot to do

other than daydream...

 

but because you gotta stay patient

for what you want most,

I'm gonna stick my pieces together

till the months get harmonious

.. 

 

Author's Note

The months are "harmonious" to what my mood wished for them to be.

Reviews

[KWP]

but because you gotta stay patient
for what you want most,
I'm gonna stick my pieces together
till the months get harmonious
..

save the best for last ... what a fantastic stanza ... what a great motto ... what a great reminder about life itself ... I really love your thought patterns ..... they are quietly waiting to be stitched into your quilt of life xx

[Daydreamer]

Elizabethhhhhhhh, thank you for the besy review evveerrr😍😍😍😍

[Daydreamer]

Besttt***😆😆😆

[Patricia]

Much better my fried!!!! This way gives the reader a chance to take in the thought before the next thought and it makes it stick in the mind instead of just passing over it....just a few small things with grammar though. Might I suggest ....
Line 1 ... "I can't wait for the moments to be harmonious"
Line 6 ... use the word "no"r in exchange for "neither"
Line 15 and 16.... "I can neither resist the beauty" "nor the electricity of the moment"
Line 20 and 21 ...."has my brain wired" "and it is buzzing endlessly"
Line 22 and 23... "and my mind has a lot to do," "other than just daydream"
I am not a fan of using "gotta's and gonna's" but that is just my taste and works here as it is a casual poem with big thoughts which has a nice feel. Don't be afraid to use "I" and "me" in your poems.
Well done! Editing is part of poetry and the most dry part of it but we all do it and help each other as much as we can. Like I said mine go through many alterations. When a post a poem it is just the first draft and it will go through many changes or none at all if readers really didn't care for the piece which is also a big help to see if my writing is getting any better. You are doing so well and taking constructive criticism so well!!!!! Most poets I know from my clubs get their feelings hurt to easily over them but you are really awesome and taking in what everyone has to say and learning!!!! Bravo for that!!!!!

[Daydreamer]

I'm speechless at the moment,Patricia!! You're an extremely helpful friend to me and I was happy to see your hearty input through this!! Huge thanks to you again and again ! I am really trying to learn and will work more on learning how to finalize my poems before presenting them to the public! I care a lot that people understand my writings the way I meant for it to be understood 👀👀👀👀

[Patricia]

No need to thank me, I am happy to help :) You just keep writing, you have a talent for it. :)

[Stephanie M]

This is a beautifully written poem about the longing to return to the simplicity of childhood.

[Daydreamer]

Thanks, but I didn't at all intend for it to mean that........ It's about longing for the future........

[Ghost of Jupiter]

A whirlwind of thoughts and emotions penned here. I loved feeling wrapped up in the words and felt the strong desire for peace in this amazing write. Well done.

[Daydreamer]

AWWW! Thankyou so much and I'm glad to know you could feel peaceful during/after your read😁😁

[Patricia]

Lots of feelings in this poem, so much that can be read between the lines and the lines themselves makes this reader give thought to them. I can feel this poem, but may I make one suggestion?....If you gave this poem breaks to punch those feelings a bit harder, it gives the reader a lingering punch of your emotions. This has a lot of it in this write, seriously- with so many emoting lines it would give it power.....just a suggestion, not that I am qualified to critique but just a penny worth's of constructive criticism :D It is a great poem, poet! :)

[Daydreamer]

Aww, Patricia, my sagacious friend! Well this review made me really really happy! That you actually perceived my poem was aimed to portray so many emotions! I do agree, there is so much of transition/swapping between the states of mind here....... I'm longing for "harmonious months"..... Which implied (as i meant) to be something in the near future rather than present.... But the central point is that thinking about my future takes so much of my present..... -"and my mind got a lot to do other than daydream"..... And I'm also a little scared and hesitated to feel that positive about the future.... But in the end, i can't help keeping up with both.....
thank you again and again😍😍😍

[Patricia]

You are welcome...it is easy to see the emotions with so many thoughts of dreams, wishes and hopes when one has to go head on with life, such as it is, hard and dark sometimes but so very beautiful if you look for it and look forward to it. That is not an easy frame of mind, most give in to hardships but there is so much out there, so much beauty and so many chances that one just can't pass by because this life is so short and it is easier if you just go with it and make what you want happen. You have a great outlook! I hope all your wishes, dreams and hopes come true!

[Daydreamer]

Couldn't agree more! Respectful and weighty opinion!!
YOU TOO 😁💛💕😍😄

[Sami Khalil]

"I know the world is no human paradise
in any phase of time or (any) space
but these stashed wishes
got my brain wired up
as they keep buzzing endlessly
and my mind got a lot to do
other than daydream
and the demands of life
are really tiring"

We all seek harmony midst the chaos of things, order within midst the disorder and sense midst the confusion. A splendid poem Manal...:).....................

[Daydreamer]

Thank you so much Sir Sami! It's an honour😃

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....

[Pryde Foltz]

life won't stop to notice anyone, I know
and I'm just another anyone
neither will the world forge itself to satisfy me

An amazing transference of thought in this piece.

[Daydreamer]

Just a trial to do so..
thankyou sweet Pryde ❤

[Mirna]

You have such great talent, I can feel it just by reading this poem. and I absolutely love how your writing just flows! amazing!
well done xxx

[Daydreamer]

Pretty Mirna, your comment is so bositerous! Thank you so much for your sweetness💗
I'm way too glad you think so!❤

[Mirna]

anytime :) xxx

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh wow this is amazing! I honestly don't have any words strong enough to describe the love for this piece. I think you did a great job, without a doubt. Keep writing and shining your glorious talent. :)

[Daydreamer]

The DreamCatcher thank you so much for your sincerity! You're like my writerscafe best friend 😂💖
This review is so kind :') Massive thanks 💘
And yessss, there are ideas I'm developing in my mind!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're welcome. Aww, I feel honored to be your Writerscafe best friend. :)

[ReneeJ]

I can relate to this piece so much. I daydream and wish a lot! What I like especially was the rhythm. I take on a different voice when I read your poems, It just rolls off the tongue and always interesting

[Daydreamer]

Awww, huge thanks Reneej 💖💖💖