Wicked Veins

Something I wrote randomly in 4 minutes.

These wicked veins were

getting too narrow

from my bitter state

enclosed in a body

that'd do nothing

but feel all wrenched

and a heart that shrouded

in blackness (in vain)from

the grudges it has built in  

I didn't want my life to revolve

around the same small circle...

so I woke up one morning when

the only pulse I believed would

make me feel alive;

was finally on my way

the only way to collapse

the lumps in these veins;

the only real breakthrough,

was choosing to forgive

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Michelle Coleman]

Hi Manal. Reading your poem reminded me of my early twenties days when I was seeing a therapist. She told me that the person I hurt most with my refusal or inability to forgive was myself. I did not believe her for some time. But I have felt those effects that you speak of and I am still learning to let go and heal. Thank you so much for sharing.

[Daydreamer]

You have no idea how much this warmed my heart!
Thank YOU for stopping by and leaving such a wonderful effect ❤💫🌌🙏

[Michelle Coleman]

You are welcome 😊

[Madalyn Beck]

Love this! Choosing to forgive can release a lot of tension and strain on the heart and mind! Great write! (:

[Daydreamer]

This is such an honor xoxo
so glad you loved it

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very smooth poem filled with emotional release. You let the anger linger it will eat away at your soul till there is nothing but bitterness in your heart.

[Daydreamer]

But I've let light into my soul once I forgave :)
thank you so much

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Exactly, I am glad to hear that.

[Daydreamer]

Thanks again:) feel free to review the other couple of pieces

[Ruth]

Lovely flow and emotion articulated here...sometimes there is no other choice but to forgive, it helps us heal and accept, enjoyed this, pleased to meet you :) x

[Daydreamer]

Forgiveness is the relief you buy yourself yet it requires a lot of courage and is so hard to perceive..
me more, Poppy:)

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

This was definitely a very interesting creation! Good commentary on how destructive grudges can be

[Daydreamer]

To be honest, I'm stunned! To me this was such a null and ambigous piece of poetry and I never expected a heart warming perception of it, like yours! THANKS :)

[just Penny]

Ah forgiveness and the alleged release that brings. I like how the tension builds in the poem. To write this "randomly in four minutes" says to me that you have quite a talent ! Nice poem. Penny

[Daydreamer]

Awww, Penny! Your comment is so cute just like you :)
yeep, I agree! This poem is full of agony. Actually, it was intentional ;)
I'd be super grateful if you reviewed the other couple of poems :)

[Jennie Baron]

Wow, sometimes the ideas for the best poetry come to us quickly! Beautifully written and so true and profound. Only thing is the seventh line sounds a little odd, maybe you mean something like "a heart that is shrouded"...Otherwise I like this very much.

[Daydreamer]

It's a privilege to receive a boisterous comment from you. Thank you so much.

[Jennie Baron]

You're welcome! :)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, this is nice. It is different and is such an amazing piece when it was created within four minutes. I can't recall spending under thirty minutes on a poem or short story. My mind tends to wander and gather other ideas all at the same time. It gets frustrating some times. Excellent job!

[Daydreamer]

Thank you so much *.*! I guess I was really eager to write this piece. It's victorious to banish off your built up grudge and i was grateful and proud when i did. Forgiveness is the extreme purgation of the soul ;)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Yeah you are right. You are welcome. :)