Wicked Veins

Wicked Veins

A Poem by Daydreamer
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Something I wrote randomly in 4 minutes.

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These wicked veins were

getting too narrow

from my bitter state

enclosed in a body

that'd do nothing

but feel all wrenched

and a heart that shrouded

in blackness (in vain)from

the grudges it has built in  

I didn't want my life to revolve

around the same small circle...

so I woke up one morning when

the only pulse I believed would

make me feel alive;

was finally on my way

the only way to collapse

the lumps in these veins;

the only real breakthrough,

was choosing to forgive



 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2014 Daydreamer


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Hi Manal. Reading your poem reminded me of my early twenties days when I was seeing a therapist. She told me that the person I hurt most with my refusal or inability to forgive was myself. I did not believe her for some time. But I have felt those effects that you speak of and I am still learning to let go and heal. Thank you so much for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daydreamer

8 Years Ago

You have no idea how much this warmed my heart!
Thank YOU for stopping by and leaving such a.. read more
Michelle Coleman

8 Years Ago

You are welcome 😊



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Wonderful! Such raw emotion and yet the poem seems controlled in such a dark and professional way. Beautiful peace!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

Such kindness 💗💗💗💗💗
A great message wrapped in a wonderful poetic style...:)....................

Posted 10 Years Ago


Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

I'm glad to hear this perception! Thank you so much Sir
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)...................
Great write with a message, liked it a lot

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

It's a huge honor to me hearing your comment!
I truly wish people forgive each other more! And.. read more
Linda alexander

10 Years Ago

You welcome, take care
Well done for four minutes. This was powerful, especially the way I read it. Good Job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

Tell me how did you read it then ;)
ReneeJ

10 Years Ago

with passion lol
Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

Hahahaahah, anything done in passion is done well 😆😆😆😆
I'll be reading your story .. read more
So, apparently this was the best piece of poem I've added till today. Thank you all for your open minded perception and I do appreciate the broadness and versatility in each perspective.
xoxo

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is intoxicatingly dark and lovely... Brings you to that world us writers live in that seems so dark and slowed down. I love this piece, and creating it in four minutes means natural talent.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

I agree, it's quite dark. Aww, thank you so much :)
This poem was very deep. The fact that you wrote it in 4 minutes is insane! i always need a lot of time on my poems. This poem is very dark and is filled with such sadness but yet it turned into a beautiful piece

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

I'm happy you have positive thoughts regarding it despite its sheer grim :*
Michelle Farren

10 Years Ago

I always try to find a positive thought in any piece i read no matter how dark it may appear (:
The only way to find peace is to forgive - You have a kind heart. Your poem is lovely
:) Julie

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daydreamer

9 Years Ago

Thaaankk youuu💖
You are a very talented poet..You have conveyed a deep thought with such an ease.
Forgiveness is a great trait.


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

THIS REVIEW WILL LINGER IN MY MIND FOR LIFE! I PROMISE!
Ayushi

10 Years Ago

:) .... that's really sweet
This is one interesting write, and the end was essence of your deep and meaninful poetry

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

Omg. Believe me, this review is highly appreciated by me.
please let me know what you think of.. read more
A. Amos

10 Years Ago

You're most welcome...sure will do
Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

Waiting for that :)

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