Wicked Veins

Something I wrote randomly in 4 minutes.

These wicked veins were

getting too narrow

from my bitter state

enclosed in a body

that'd do nothing

but feel all wrenched

and a heart that shrouded

in blackness (in vain)from

the grudges it has built in  

I didn't want my life to revolve

around the same small circle...

so I woke up one morning when

the only pulse I believed would

make me feel alive;

was finally on my way

the only way to collapse

the lumps in these veins;

the only real breakthrough,

was choosing to forgive

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Michelle Coleman]

Hi Manal. Reading your poem reminded me of my early twenties days when I was seeing a therapist. She told me that the person I hurt most with my refusal or inability to forgive was myself. I did not believe her for some time. But I have felt those effects that you speak of and I am still learning to let go and heal. Thank you so much for sharing.

[Daydreamer]

You have no idea how much this warmed my heart!
Thank YOU for stopping by and leaving such a wonderful effect ❤💫🌌🙏

[Michelle Coleman]

You are welcome 😊

[Rita L. Sev]

Yes, forgiveness is a choice, and necessary lest the disease of bitterness fester... Well penned, Manal.

[Daydreamer]

Thank you, miss Rita 😖

[Matching Socks]

Very nicely done, I don't think it matters how long it takes to write something.
4 minutes is a long time and you can experience a myriad of emotions in 4 minutes.

[Daydreamer]

Well said!! And, thank you so much for visiting😁❤

[Patricia]

oooooo!!!! I love love love this!!! AWESOME!

[Daydreamer]

*speechless me*😂💗

[Kristen]

I like it. I was immediately attracted by the title and I enjoyed how you melded the emotional pieces to the physiological! Quite interesting and thought-provoking. Nice work.

[Daydreamer]

Thanks,Kristen 😍

[Moonie]

I love the meaning behind it and the words connect brilliantly. :))

[Daydreamer]

Thanks,buddy😆

[Moonie]

No probs.
--ferocious.

[Mirra]

When a poem is written in such a short time, it's either the emotion is so strong to the extend of it urges you to write it down or else you'll gonna burst or the writer is excellent, for this piece I think it's both. The emotions are well-expressed, great poem!

[Daydreamer]

THANKYOU💖 I guess it's the first one- I was eager to write this and hence the force has driven me to produce it! Glad you loved the darkness 😈

[Mirra]

And you've made a wonderful piece ^_^ Darkness seem to reach me more :-)

[Daydreamer]

Hahaha, I love it though!

[TL Boehm]

Articulates so well the crowded - closed off condition of the heart, the soul. And the only way to open up is to forgive. Well done.

[Daydreamer]

Yes.... Thank you for reading and returning your opinion❤

[gabrielle]

written in 4 minutes? Wow. Nurturing grudge or hate is like a burning charcoal which we hold in our hands-- in the end, it is us who will get burned/hurt. short yet full of lesson. Keep sharing =)

[Daydreamer]

Exactly! Which is something that many don't realize! I truly think people need to banish off their grudges and embrace forgiveness more often! Grudges keep bottling up, they could go on and on! It would keep hurting forever, but that doesn't mean you should keep it forever! Thankyou Gabrielle💗💗💗💗

[Daydreamer]

And, 4 minutes because of eagerness, I suppose (?)💔

[jacob erin-cilberto]

grudges take so much effort to keep...the heart disappears within them and almost stops beating...but forgiveness can free us...and get us resuscitated so that we can live in peace with ourselves, with our own consciences...

[Daydreamer]

Exactly! Was this lucid enough in my poem :)?