Wicked Veins

Something I wrote randomly in 4 minutes.

These wicked veins were

getting too narrow

from my bitter state

enclosed in a body

that'd do nothing

but feel all wrenched

and a heart that shrouded

in blackness (in vain)from

the grudges it has built in  

I didn't want my life to revolve

around the same small circle...

so I woke up one morning when

the only pulse I believed would

make me feel alive;

was finally on my way

the only way to collapse

the lumps in these veins;

the only real breakthrough,

was choosing to forgive

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Michelle Coleman]

Hi Manal. Reading your poem reminded me of my early twenties days when I was seeing a therapist. She told me that the person I hurt most with my refusal or inability to forgive was myself. I did not believe her for some time. But I have felt those effects that you speak of and I am still learning to let go and heal. Thank you so much for sharing.

[Daydreamer]

You have no idea how much this warmed my heart!
Thank YOU for stopping by and leaving such a wonderful effect ❤💫🌌🙏

[Michelle Coleman]

You are welcome 😊

[Gee]

Not bad for a 4 minute write.Good job

[Daydreamer]

Yep I know it's not any bad!
Thanks for reading 😎

[DoormanDan]

I'm impressed that you wrote something as nice as this in just four minutes. That's always a clear sign that you posess talent as writer. I absolutely love this poem! Good job! :)

[Daydreamer]

Thankyouuuu so much! Appreciated whole-heartedly!

[MomzillaNC]

We must forgive to move on. We forgive perhaps more for our own sakes than for the forgiven. Because, when we hold onto grudges, when we refuse to forgive, we empower the person who hurt us to keeping hurting us.

[Daydreamer]

That's what I said........
Thank you for the read 😁

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

So true, forgive and forget. Love this poem. :))

Kaze~

[Daydreamer]

Thankyouu :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Anytime. :-))

[Cool Girl]

Wow! I love the emotion you put into it:) Also thank sfor accepting my friend request:)

- Cool Girl (ultimate fan of your work)

[Daydreamer]

Wow! That's really cool of you,cool girl 😝😝
thank you sooo muchh💜💜

[Cool Girl]

You are so totally welcome:)

[Aayushi]

True...forget and forgive. For the pain to stop one should let go off all the grudges. A poem with the touch of bitter reality. Good work my friend.

[Daydreamer]

Very,very few people embrace the true attribute of forgiveness, so I decided I must share my take on this topic! FORGIVENESS MATTERS!🙌

[Aayushi]

We should forgive not for the other person's sake but for our peace of mind.

[Daydreamer]

Sureellyy💕💕💕

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Thank you for your kind review and comments
you left on my page and this piece.


I loved this stanza's line my favorite.


the only real breakthrough,

was choosing to forgive


Blessings. Kindred Poet

[Daydreamer]

Haha, I see, it was my favorite too! Thank you back,dear...
Stay all blessed x😍

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

It's a pleasure my friend. you're very welcome. Blessings. Kindred Poet

[Susan Beth Horvath]

wonderful images realized with depth and clarity. Well done!!

[Daydreamer]

Oh wow! Thank you so much!!♥♥

[Tricia Pattinson]

Nicely done view and very thoughtful! I loved the ending!

[Daydreamer]

People should forgive each other more, I think♥
Thank you so much for your visit!💘😇