Winter Haiku

The cold desolation of winter sometimes reflects that of the heart.

Losing her, a dream,
winter ravaged my soul.
The snowman melts.

Reviews

[ElizaB]

There is such power here!

Immediately I questioned this loss: is it one of bereavement or one of the heart? It seems that in losing 'her' that life is also lost. That the narrators dreams, present and future are replaced by darkness. The sun; also lost in the arms of winter. All that remains must be damaged by the cold and dark.

Finally, the snowman. This conjured an image of a child in tears. Although the age of the narrator is not given it just seems like the final straw to push sadness into suffering.

Thank you for sharing!
Best wishes,

ELiza

[Nolo Segundo]

Thank you, Eliza, for your most thoughtful review. All your interpretations are valid; I wrote its several years after my former fiance and I broke up.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed a description of the permafrost that seals the rejected heart in a cold tomb. That melting feeling being the opposite to the melting in the heat of desire/love as it is cold and barren and soulless.

[Nolo Segundo]

Thank you, John, for the insightful exegesis!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

cool poem excuse my pun
love it
love the ending
thanks for entry into my 5 lines and under comp

[Nolo Segundo]

Thank you, J., it is much appreciated!

[KCthelastboyscout]

Winter time,which is close to the end of the year, is a perfect time to reflect on loss

[Nolo Segundo]

Apologies for not thanking you earlier, KC- I was remiss

[Fran Marie]

This haiku speaks a sadness of loss and desolation..a powerful piece for sure..nice work..

[Nolo Segundo]

Thank you Fran-- sorry I didn't get back sooner

[Kelly Scheppers]

The brevity of a piece often tends to be a gravitational pull for me. A beautifully worded haiku!

[Nolo Segundo]

Sorry Kelly-- somehow I missed thanking you before-- mea culpa!

[Kelly Scheppers]

No apology needed. You are most welcomed!

[emmajoy]

A sadness here but nonetheless a beautiful haiku... and indeed, the snowman melts. Sighhh.

[Nolo Segundo]

Thank you, Emmajoy-- my salvation was when my snowman finally did melt....

[emmajoy]

One has only to wait til the light lengthens..

[Najam Us Saher]

Very few words but expresses many emotions. I iked this haiku a lot as it perfectly captures the emotion of losing someone.

[Nolo Segundo]

Thank you, Najam-- but the loss spurred me on to a great gain eventually, the way life often evens out.

[Najam Us Saher]

I agree with you. You are most welcome.