My Eyes...

My Eyes...

A Poem by nocturnalbeast

Trapped in the confusion and pain instilled in my brown eyes,

Can't get out.

How I wish I could see past it.

The pain weakens me.

WEAK.

The pain confuses me.

CONFUSION.

Can't see past the rain clouds.

Can't.....if all you're used to is, rain.

Can't recognize sunlight.

Trapped in a dreary existence;

within my eyes.

© 2008 nocturnalbeast


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Where there is life, there is hope. Your eyes will always witness everything that happens to you, so all of the good will become photographs taken by your eyes...
Good job!

Posted 15 Years Ago


I love the wording...and the voice that you have
created for yourself!


Posted 16 Years Ago


from the inside looking out, it is good i just think that you could have used better words to describe your feelings

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Who lends an eye to look into? Only then can we see beyond our own. You really felt what you wrote. Good.

Posted 16 Years Ago


nice! if you only know sadness how can you recognize happiness? well written and thought out. we all chase the elusive creature known as happiness, some are lucky enough to find it but then only for a while.

good luck on your quest.

Blessed be!
Fallon

Posted 16 Years Ago


"Can't see past the rain clouds.
Can't.....if all you're used to is, rain."

I loved these lines in particular. It's like I say to people - you can't see happiness if sadness is all you know.

So sad that people really feel like this. Hope you find your happiness.

Josie


Posted 16 Years Ago


This is an amazing piece!!
Great Write!! Kudos!!!

Posted 16 Years Ago


Very eloquently written. I love the bolds and italics. It makes it all the more powerful.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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I really don't know..... I'm kindda confused about myself right now.... But...whoever is reading this....I LOVE U!. [[really]]. I love acting. [[Theatre is my life]] singing. [[harmonizing]] dancing. .. more..

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A Poem by nocturnalbeast



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