Conscious

I finally see tonight

I live within my mind

I've given up time

The Illusion was mine

 

I don't know anything

One exception I see

Me

My Necessity

 

I know I am surrounded

By A Sea A Swarm

Of Uncertainty

Bend the bars with me

 

Be

Determined to Be

By Neccessity

Uncertainties

Enemy

 

 

Find the Key

Follow me

As you use the key

Open mindbox

 

Set free to see

No Cage

No box

No key

 

Cacophony

Symmetry

Cosmic Symphony

Static

 

Cry havoc with me

We don't want to be

Silent Lucidity

Do you hear me

 

Scream with Me

I scream

You scream

The song sings

 

A Rat Race

No brakes

 No steering wheel

 Drive

 

Grind

Chase a dime
Don't fall behind

You have a point

 

In space time

Continual motion

Constant lightspeed

Hyperdimensional Geometry

 

Knowing only your need

Plant a seed

 Secret Space

Garden of your Heart

 

Then Start

To Tend the Secret garden

Weeding Anything

That chokes the Seeds

You Love

 

Hope Work

For what you need

If you want to see

Roots twine

 

Look to the bedrock

To see healthy

Flowers in the garden

Where you start

 

Each new day

Remember

A Secret Space

Where dreams can be a seed

Author's Note

I love you to!!

Reviews

[sandra Counts]

This is my favorite stanza:
Then Start
To Tend the Secret garden
Weeding Anything
That chokes the Seeds
You Love

This really applies to daily life...keeping focused on goals/draems...what needs to grow and thrive and getting the dang weeds out of the way!

[antdoggy]

The is another classic storyline...I give it a 90 out of 100 because it a baby compair to Mirror, Mirror...but also a great story.....i know you should compair a writer's story from one another but your hardest comparation is yourself!!! lol

[oneZtwoLLs]

Your use of short, dynamic statements makes your writing intriguing. Strong piece. Remarkable.

[Bubo]

I found this really unusual and fascinating in context and thought, very powerful short stanza's.
Each new day

Remember

A Secret Space

Where dreams can be a seed

After such confusion and a feeling of being trapped we are free to dream.............
Very creative ..........

[Tania Leigh]

Another strong write, very creative words here, and a good message. The last stanza stands well on its own:

"Each new day
Remember
A Secret Space
Where dreams can be a seed"

I really like this.

[Constance]

I like this!
How often do I read a poem with the words hyper-dimensional geometry in it? You crafted this well.
My favorite part is the metaphor of the garden, the bedrock, the seed that you sow, the twining roots. Lovely.