With Colours Gone

reflective poem

With colours gone 

Grey, forlorn 

The sky a puddle, muddy morn 

I have no tears 

I give thee thorns. 

Where laughter lived 

To once exist 

The room aswirl, silent cyst 

I have no tears 

I give thee mist. 

When passion played 

And love was made 

Fingers clasped and grasped in vain 

I have no tears 

I give thee reign.

Author's Note

Looking out the window on a grey, misty day.

Reviews

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

this was a very well-written piece that explores the interplay of what is on the outside and what is on the inside. the winter, grey and gloomy is described immaculately 'With colours gone / Grey, forlorn' a great couplet. and the change of perspective, delving into the persona's mind was natural. this verse was held together by a lyrical style that is easy on the ear. overall, it is a delicate, melancholic vignette.

[nj coleman]

Ern,
Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review. You saw/noticed some facets that were lost on me....the change of perspective, what is on the outside and then on the inside. It's difficult at times to look at your own work as you would other poets' work. I like that.
Looking forward to enjoying your art.

[Chris Shaw]

Sadness comes through with every line. Your poetic expression is beautiful and your final line adds even more value.

Chris

[Jenny Lee]

I could never even hope to diagnose a poem as well as Ern! I only know what I feel when reading.
I see the author staring out a window at the dreariness of the day, no color, wet, the soul lost and alone.
A family once existed with this soul and now is gone leaving only memories of the passion, love, and laughter once shared. This poem hurts my heart. It's a melancholy poem. Sometimes they're the best. I love this one!

[nj coleman]

Thank you for your kind review. I'm sorry that it hurt you to read it. I'll take that as a compliment.

[Jenny Lee]

We can't avoid pain, even the pain of others. Where would we get our empathy? You related your pain so eloquently without using the well worn words, I'm Hurt. Thank you for showing us your heart, poet.

[nj coleman]

You just made me smile. Thank you.

[Einstein Noodle]

some days are like that aren't they? grey and misty .. deeply felt your poem .. especially appreciate the closing ... "I give thee reign" ... wow! such sadness ... we become ill with things that will not relent .. but neither do our human hearts and passions .. such a poignant sadness says i
E.

[nj coleman]

Thank you for your review. Some poems are meant to be read, not heard. As this one with the word "reign". Adds a totally different meaning and, truth be told, that's my favorite part too.
Thank you again E

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .......................

[Mr Question]

I see a lonely soul unsure of their feelings of a recent breakup. The dark day enhances dark feelings. I have been there many years ago as a young man and it brought those feelings back but aged wisdom and many years of a good relationship place it in perspective. It is a good journey through an understanding of sadness.

[nj coleman]

Thank you for your insightful review. It is much appreciated.

[G. Lova]

I love it. This poem powerfully evokes the crushing weight of grief. It has a melancholy and somewhat defiant tone.

[nj coleman]

Thank you for your kind words. And for the phrase "defiant tone". That is clear to me now although I didn't recognize it until you mentioned it. Thanks for that!

[Starr]

WOW, this is quite an emotional piece, Very well written and expressed.

[nj coleman]

Thank you for your kind review.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, looking out the window at the sky and nature...but also the nature of life...we cry so many tears during our lives often we run out...
there are no more to cry...and all the love that is in vain....shed like blood from the heart.
THis is forlorn and moving.
good work.

[nj coleman]

Jacob,
you saw it as written and as I later understood it to be. I appreciate your intuitiveness and insight.
Look forward to reading/reviewing more of your art.

[Fairy]

It's really touching, hope you are doing good... if something is not good don't worry I'm sure god will bring everything right when time comes. Get well soon...