Marmite Love

As the stars burn, rake in the silver sky

Lighting it up, like a cinema screen;

Lift your dainty hand and draw,

Marmite love on our canvas of dreams.

 

As you fade, I’ll begin

Let me in your simple self

And sway

And stay,

there

till the mortal end.

 

On a fragrant hill someplace lay, a snug you-me;

Squirrels sneak into a daisy, grass and love entwine.

We stare, in trance; at our sublime canvas

at an abstract life so quite.

A sudden chirp precedes your crinkled smile…

The warmth of it…against the coldness of the dew.

 

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[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

On a fragrant hill someplace lay, a snug you-me;
Squirrels sneak into a daisy, grass and love entwine.
We stare, in trance; at our sublime canvas
at an abstract life so quite.

Wow, amazing write. This poem just flows together beautifully, nicely penned.

Kaze~ :-)

[Frontier]

As you fade, I’ll begin
Let me in your simple self
And sway
And stay,
there
till the mortal end. - i really like this stanza, it shines thru for me, and the let me in your simple self...quite unique :)

[Brook]

I like the rhythm, and the tone. I think you've wrote this well. The imagery is wonderful. Good job :)