Voyeur's rage

Penned on February 15 2008

I heard  your moans through the wall,
It pierced my frantic head and was left stranded.
So now I am here to  lick your vestal skin,
and find the rapier to thrust in your narrow slit.

Peeling the raiments one by one,
Drop in your bed and divest yourself. 
Your vale swollen with lymph is mine,
on the grub of my phallus you thrive.

Now I have a barbed knife in my hand.
I mutilate your vexed canal, 
repleted with the grimes of many fornicators.
While you cum serum along with blood,
The putrid unbearable smell of that
rattles my lecherous mind

The anguish in your parched eyes,
satiates my sadistic sight.
Now even my genitals covets that machete,
and leaches into the elicit chasm.
With every groans you utter,
Inch by inch,
I would percolate my delectable member.

Look in my glint eyes ,
You can’t escape from my claws,
That spilt today is destined to me.
You still have to smother my crotch,
And swollow my sordid slaine venom.

I  ejaculate ,you torrid noxious dale,
the rancid semen amalgated with blood.
I fornicate till you pulverize to  death.

Reviews

[Richard Williams]

Sharp and vivid, freedom of imagination.

[Jazique]

I barely know what half the words off but, that was very descriptive. Well done. Very creative and all.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Spaced and almost forced, a well written piece.

[Layla J Omorose]

Though I did enjoy this poem and it's rawness I'm not sure of what I am supposed to be feeling when I read this. I know the tittle implies rage and I do feel that along with a sense of violation and loss but there is also this raw sensuality within the poem from the words you choose to use. Because I have these mixed feelings I'm not exactly sure what the poem is talking about because once again from your play with words I feel as if it is about more than just a boat. Even with those issues I still enjoyed reading this poem and it was well written.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

intense, and well written

[sherwin]

I can't stop laughing everytime I read this, sorry I'm not sure if this is supposed to be a heavy poem but that last line has me still crackin up "I fornicate till you pulverize to death." LOL! good composition.

[Lily Mae]

This is raw and intense, you did a great job expressing those types of feelings. x

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a amazing writer. Your skill with words made the poem come alive and seem real. I like the step by step feel of the poem. Each line with purpose and reason. I had to read the poem a few times. This is a outstanding poem. Maybe a adult rating? Thank you.
Coyote

[Aidz]

A pleasant enough write ;)

My dark side reveled in this