Fate

Fate

Summers of the midforties.
Keeping everyone on ends,
was the Blitz Krieg’s fury.

The concentration camps
that Nazis reign,
Had David who grounded in Spain.
Roaming in that Long gown,
But his eyes never frowned.

Amidst these days of pain,
On one midnight hour,
Bevy in the camp resorted to guns,
And the rampage for the freedom had begun.

Seeing this chaos,
David seize the opportunity,
And started his flight, 
To meet his destiny.

Disguising in the dark shadows.
Strolling towards west,
Expedition he started,
With sundial and the malt bread.

Kissing the fields of 
Sadistic generals,
And the rape of innocence,
Through macabre he witnessed.

Reaching the fringes,
Hee crossed the fence.
And his timeless journey,
Thus came to an end.

Militia around him,
Welcomed him to the land.
He waited  all these days, 
To breathe in his own land.

Hearing the sound of the gun,
Which seemed to be an angel,
And this one bullet ,
Scripted his fate .

The short range magnum,
pierced his skin,
And his feeble knees ,
Started sinking in.

The last breathe he sighed,
With smile he embraced,
Seeking tranquility,
In the laps of his motherland .

Reviews

[Aarontastic]

I like this poem. It tells an interesting story, even if it is a little vague. The way it's written makes the read a little awkward, but it still felt controlled--as if you wrote it that way intentionally. Lines like these three from the second stanza:

"The concentration camps
that Nazis reign,
Had David who grounded in Spain."

I kind of stumbled over them in the beginning, but this 'awkwardness' seemed to be a sort of recurring thing throughout the poem, so instead of feeling incongruous it sort of works somehow.

The story I didn't completely get--I was sort of wondering if David was a historical person or not. Either way I think it was really interesting...I liked the sort of tragic ending; even though he escaped from the concentration camps he couldn't escape his fate v.v good job.

[Jazique]

Nice very interesting and descriptive. well done.

[Richard Williams]

Intensely powerful and memorable.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A poignant and relative prose to a dark and somewhat lost time, well done

[Poetic Beauty]

You have written about one of the times in history that captures my attention. You have penned this well.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

A brilliant powerful piece!

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for this strong poem. Sometime people become tire and weak. Allow them self to feel invincible. The Jews of the WW2 time were surprised by the way he turned against them. Hitler did many terrible thing. He hated gays, handicap and Gypsies. Funny part he wrote down his goals in his book. I like the story in the poem. Some people did fight. But if was too late to be organized and prepared. A very strong ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Lily Mae]

This is an amazing write..I love it...x

[Tasha]

This was amazing, and so powerful because many Jews thought their only fate was death than surviving the beatings and everything else. This was written wonderfully.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

very good write, :)