Love In the rain.

Picturesque she looked in her dotted blue dress.
Waiting was I on our usual dating place.
Like from a fountain,Romance sprinkl'd from the heaven.
Me Romeo astounded as if my Juliet brought with her the rain.
Waiting was my patience and by lord it was sweeter too;
For priceless rewards were like- On a Queue.
The loyalty of her love that fascinated my heart.
The sweet fragrance of her,lull'd me like a venomous dart.
The breeze just nimbly threw her locks upon my face.
And finally the heart did touch the heart!And was it so amazed.
The time ran so fast and never did pause.
The dusk came up and finally she had to rush.
"Love In the rain is precious",me Romeo thought;
Walking towards the house,wishing everyday is that what I got.

Reviews

[LiberScriptus]

I think this poem is very well written, and you seem to have a real knack for using language to take the reader into the world you've set up here. I think the structure you have here really works and you show a great use of vocabulary and sentence structure. I also think it's of a great length, just long enough. Great job!

[Hazle Eyed Girl]

nicely written. and well done. i like how you use old english but it is a little confusing so the flow of it was a little rough.

[xXxCynicalWarsxXx]

This poem was well written, quite the descripition of words that send the reader into a world so kind, so wondrous with colors and sensitivity. I really liked this. I cannot wait to read more!

[Gilbert Saint]

I like this, great paper, however, be careful when mixing old and present English. The inversion of sentences is a method used in old English, like; what do you say was said as; what say you. Mixing the two may make your poem look like its traveling time and its confused where to stop. Its good that the poem has depth, I can feel you in this poem, its flow and glow is real. Good paper Romeo

[Demi Rose]

such a lovely poem. it is beautifully penned.

[TheFemininePad]

Amazing, and well written. I love you how used some Shakespeare within the poem. The imagery was perfect, and helped to draw me into the scene. There is power in writing, and you have demonstrated this. Poems are a great way to get what is inside our hearts onto paper. Sometimes it helps to relieve the pain we keep bottled up. Great job here.

[Dayran]

Its a creation of nature, has its own rules, functions by itself and comes up with the most amazing wonders of experience a man will ever encounter - its called a woman. Nice write!

[taylorrose]

thank your for sharing this with me i appreciate the words you used and its really good. i think you so got it.

[nishalization]

Thank you. Really appreciate your words.

[pratishtha]

this poem is really heart touchin.. wish you get your juliet.. its my pleasure reading your this work.... great job gentleman... keep up....