Love In the rain.

Picturesque she looked in her dotted blue dress.
Waiting was I on our usual dating place.
Like from a fountain,Romance sprinkl'd from the heaven.
Me Romeo astounded as if my Juliet brought with her the rain.
Waiting was my patience and by lord it was sweeter too;
For priceless rewards were like- On a Queue.
The loyalty of her love that fascinated my heart.
The sweet fragrance of her,lull'd me like a venomous dart.
The breeze just nimbly threw her locks upon my face.
And finally the heart did touch the heart!And was it so amazed.
The time ran so fast and never did pause.
The dusk came up and finally she had to rush.
"Love In the rain is precious",me Romeo thought;
Walking towards the house,wishing everyday is that what I got.

Reviews

[LiberScriptus]

I think this poem is very well written, and you seem to have a real knack for using language to take the reader into the world you've set up here. I think the structure you have here really works and you show a great use of vocabulary and sentence structure. I also think it's of a great length, just long enough. Great job!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I really like the bit of rhyming in this poem, and the emotion of love, nice title as well as the poetic words. Nice poem.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

I had to read this one more time, as it is written in such a way that once through simply is not enough.

[nishalization]

Thank you very much for your words... you've been so hearty! :]

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

A most wonderful poem!

[CHRIS ANDES]

feels like I'm walking in the rain...while reading this,itw's like a song..

[Brandi Nicole]

i have always enjoyed reading the male's perspective of love. this one is exceptional. very well written. good job!

[Enigma]

Beautifully written. Loved it! :D

[∂αʌ<..]

:)
this had me smiling!
love in the rain! shakespeare would have been in jubilee! lol
e.x.q.u.i.s.i.t.e poem! i could almost imagine the balcony scene...perhaps i could far fetched it and say stars began to fall...a subtle breeze murmuring and juliet in her whitish rosy gown came flowing down from the balcony to meet romeo...and their fingers touched...the stars changed into a fine drizzle of a thousand million little fireflies blinking lights!

guess i dream too much!
awesome poem! :)

[Mashairi]

Beautiful, seemly beautiful. Round of Applause :)

[ChrisCooli]

Beautiful ! :)

[Shelly S.]

this is romantic, its like reading a line from an historical romance book... just takes you to another place