Victoria Day, 2008

Victoria Day, 2008

A Poem by James Takeo Panton

 

I sit and smoke, in hazy room
As evenings ends lazy afternoon
And day goes long, and light grows dim
And night begins to settle in
Distant sound, claps in the sky

Near some Great Lake, the fireworks fly

On this Victoria Day, at summer’s eve
With slight chill in air, here I am relieved
On this one day, golden and long
In quietness, I listen to soulful songs
And soon it ends, another one
Now it is here, now it is gone
Another day, another end
Another poem do I now send
To mark this day, as it is now passed
Not just the first, nor is it the last

© 2008 James Takeo Panton


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Last time I was in Canada for Victoria Day, I saw a drug deal from an alley way. I was in a marching band.
My sister just came back from her weekend extravaganza of the same variety (she plays the trumpet). She's mucho sunburnt, and still exhausted and feverish.

I think you're depriving us of a lot of things, here. You're just saying this day is gone, this poem is gone... It's not the first, not the last... But really--what else is there to say? You could say so much more, that's what. You could... Yeah. Just, do a lot more than what you have. Give us more! (!!!)

The averageness, the passing of another day... It's more than just another day, right? Or else you wouldn't have written about it, no? Wouldn't have titled it as such. Right now, I have no idea what separates Victoria Day from anygiventhursday.

But your rhymes are tight, man. Kudos on that.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Last time I was in Canada for Victoria Day, I saw a drug deal from an alley way. I was in a marching band.
My sister just came back from her weekend extravaganza of the same variety (she plays the trumpet). She's mucho sunburnt, and still exhausted and feverish.

I think you're depriving us of a lot of things, here. You're just saying this day is gone, this poem is gone... It's not the first, not the last... But really--what else is there to say? You could say so much more, that's what. You could... Yeah. Just, do a lot more than what you have. Give us more! (!!!)

The averageness, the passing of another day... It's more than just another day, right? Or else you wouldn't have written about it, no? Wouldn't have titled it as such. Right now, I have no idea what separates Victoria Day from anygiventhursday.

But your rhymes are tight, man. Kudos on that.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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James Takeo Panton
James Takeo Panton

Edmonton, Alberta, Canada, Canada



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I am a 38-year old amateur and have only recently started writing some stuff. I began putting down these words around November, 2007, and discovered that I enjoyed doing this, and now I am seeing w.. more..

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