Night of The Daffodils

 

Golden flowers, burning bright

In the gardens late at night

Smiling brightly like the sun

Beauty in the dusk, seen by none

Gently blooming beneath the stars

Glowing through darkness from afar

Beauty lies amongst the grass

But with time this shall soon pass

Their lives cut short as weeks go on

Until time and decay makes them gone

Such beauty unbound, gentle, and pure

Simple and silent they will endure

In the gardens of the night

Before the coming of morning light

Such simple beauty do I seek

Gives me strength when I am weak

But soon I know they will go

Only a memory, left with my woe

For the world is evil and bleak and black

My life grows unsettled, no turning back

The world shall come to mow us down

Turn my laughter to heavy frown

The time if decay it comes so soon

Beneath the light of silvery moon

And with the dawn in its cold light

Shall end this beautiful silent night

With the noise and the evil and the pain

All the feelings return again

Of the world with its malice and fright

At the end of this lovely night

It comes gnashing, gnarling, and growling

Screaming, anguish, howling

With teeth like knives that come to tear

With darkness coming in the air

I embrace the daffodils before they are gone

Leaving their memory to carry on

Before the coming of evil world’s day

Before this memory goes away

Reviews

[Michael X]

i really enjoyed this writing, its poetical in essence, the design encapsulates your thoughts with full
spectrum imagery, you did a stellar job at creating the magical scenery, draws the readers heart
to ponder, and speaks a timeless passion, how seasons come and go, to live in the beauty of the present,
never taking the future for grantite, as well the metaphorcial analogy leaves the soul feeling
having gained a bit more perspective on the world and all its gloriousness, thanks for sharing such talent

The only thing that I can is that its a wonderful poem and I enjoy it reading it. Good Job

[pal]

A nice poem, great flow.

[Pointblank]

I imagine you out and about after dark finding brief joy in the daffodills. Then comparing how the world can hold such beauty yet hold so much pain. Thinking about the future and what it holds..not only for the daffodills but for yourself. I feel like I walk along with you in your writings. Weather I do or not it makes me feel, think and remember. That is talent to me.. It is a sad one I believe. I enjoyed reading it.

[Butch Decatoria]

I try not to say anything that may offend or anger or sadden anyone, not saying that I will now - but my idea poem (although this is a good example of lyrical poetry) has more than rhyming, it should have some underlying message (which I may be missing--blind as I am) or emotional umph to it. This does not mean the poem is not note worthy, it's simplicity may be the truth of it. It even can possibly be made into song. Also do not understand the importance of the daffodil, and why there is so much mention of darkness and pain. This may just be a poet's poem - where he will be the only one to know it's meaning. Iwould like to see more use of poetic tools, such as : metaphors, allusions, juxtapositionings, or stylistic (literary) forms like a sonnet, nonet, or pantuom. If stanzas were made, creating a cluster of paragraphs, perhaps it may change the whole by creating little poems in each -when combined to make a grander piece.

I apologize ahead of time if I have offended you, or if you think I'm an a*****e, I do not mean to cause any grief, because this forum is a wonderful place to begin to explore, even - one's deep rooted creativity. Dig deep enough, liquid gold may arise - which you must let those juices flow. Godspeed and keepo digging.

[Neva Bryan]

This poem is a great effort. Lovely and disturbing imagery. I like the lines:

Gently blooming beneath the stars
Glowing through darkness from afar

I shall walk through my garden some spring night and see if it's as frightening and sad as the garden you've created with your words.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Birth, life, death and rebirth; this piece gives metaphorical references to them all. The beauty of nature verses the degenerative interferences of mankind. There is a attraction in your work that holds the reader throughout the sweet and sour of your reflections. Excellent write!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Destiny]

I really liked the description of the flowers. The imagery here was very vivid. Very well written. Thanx for writing.
♥Destiny♥

[James K. Blaylock]

I really enjoyed this powerful piece, it is packed with much emotions.

jkb

[Adam Jordan Turner]

Stunning, absolutely stunning. I love this piece, it's completely my style, when I was reading it I actually felt like the author....that's how good it was, I've never been proud of someone else's work, in that way, before. I could pick out this and that of which I liked the most, but I just loved it all. It was very real, very heartfelt, and dark, I love the reluctant sense of reality, and the imagery was also quite nice! It had all the technical components of a great work, plus some extra to really touch the reader. Very nice write, thank you very much for sharing!