This Suicide Will Be PodCast

Just ranting......not to be taken too seriously.......

 

This suicide will be PodCast

It will be broadcast on your screen

It will be featured on MySpace, and Facebook,

And YouTube too

You can get it on your MSN Messenger

On your webcam in real time

My descent will be transmitted

For everyone to see

My mourners will be the audience

My blog is my eulogy

Does this page define me?

Do these words make any sense?

Everyone I know is neatly compacted here

Packaged to be viewed

Click and refresh for comments

Email and forward to all in your list

Here we are connected

In these tiny little boxes

Waiting for a reply, a response

Seeking a connection

How sad has man become

That it has come to this!

We are isolated and alone

And connect without touching anymore

We left-click, cry, and laugh

And quickly search for more

But THIS suicide will be public

For everyone to see

World Wide Web will document it

For eternity

There will be a page somewhere

That will say “HERE I AM”

And someone will take notice

When they see me on their cam

And when I am gone, and all is lost

And I have become no more

Maybe you can download it

And on your hard drive, store

Somewhere on the internet

I can always be

But it will never document

What IS the real me

Reviews

[RAWR!]

very nice, it has a nice modern, post modern feel to it.
(i know that sound abnoxious but i really mean i like it)

there where some cleverness to it as well.
sorry, wit, i guess would be the word to describe what i mean.

oh and the rhyming was from very good to excelnt.
still written very casually, like your just letting some steam off.
but the word suicide i think makes it very, edgy.

i like it, its honest and good.
thank you for sharing, and thank you for your reivew on my piece.


meow

[Tickle me not]

That was rather original (Sounds kinda sarcastic but its not! :P)
Your rant makes a very simple, accurately good point about technology today how people allow others see a moment of our life whenever they find it interesting.
Me likey!

[Aries]

This is Totally Awesome....every line speaks truth....Powerful insight into todays Reality......Awesome Writing!

[Rain]

Unfortunately, this piece may be more prophetic than bizarre. This is a profound piece maybe without you knowing it, although I think you see it's possibility. It's powerful in it's probability. Great write. Rain..

[shadadakiya]

yeah brings back a couple of months ago when i took over a 100 pills,because i din't won't to live in this sick world anymore, because i felt that every thing around me was just fake and crule.well said

[Penny Ellen]

You had me at PodCast. It's honestly, very vey sad that our world has become, in large part, boxes on screens, and photos and profiles. Yet, here we are, in cyberspace, putting poems on the internet.
Oh, the irony.

[Ralphy]

It's well written, has great poise but honestly it's scary. The significance of touch is in reality missing from our cyber world. On the other hand it captured my attention and flowed like an unobstructed river with a swift message.

[Jane Doe]

This is an extremely well written piece. I especially liked these lines:

Here we are connected
In these tiny little boxes
Waiting for a reply, a response
Seeking a connection
How sad has man become
That it has come to this!

I really enjoyed this poem, you did a great job!

[Star-Runner]

Now I really enjoyed this one, This one has it going on, very well written here.