Cloud 9...

i lost myself on cloud number 9...

above the misty pink blue sky...

when i came back down... i was surprised to find...

my foolish heart... missed being up so high...

confused and puzzled like a young little boy...

i wondered each day if that cloud was gone...

but little did i know... i would feel such joy...

to know that cloud number 9... was with me all along...

Author's Note

yes... cloud number 9 was indeed with me all along...

Reviews

[Desiree O'Neal]

interesting. not bad at all.

[NaugleB]

Very nice, enjoyable read :)

[N!LoC]

thank you naugle b !

[GlacialStars]

Right! So that true! A famous philosopher once said. Men are sad because they don't know they are happy. Sadly in for got the guy's name but that's not important right now. What's important how short and nicely you put it. Such a melodious piece that just flows evenly with the message. Keep up the good work man.

[N!LoC]

yeah... i try to make my poems have that certain flow... poems with rhymes sound more reader friendly too :-)

[GlacialStars]

XD I admit it is! I was thrilled when I saw the rhymes xDD

[Butch Decatoria]

good stuff, thanks for sharing

[N!LoC]

and thanks for taking time to read and drop a review.. i appreciate it :-)

[Butch Decatoria]

no problem.

[Tasha]

This is so sweet, and I'm glad that cloud 9 was with you.
~Tasha

[N!LoC]

yes... sometimes things can be right under your nose and yet you never realize it :-)

[Tasha]

It really can...at least you noticed. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

youth can and should stay with us all our lives...

simple but sweet poem...

two suggestions...a couple unnecessary words...

just say "cloud 9"
and either "like a young boy" or "like a little boy"

[N!LoC]

thanks for the input... i actually used those "filler" words to make the sentence abit more longer so it would flow evenly..