The Winter experiement

The wind howled as I raced through across the icy path. He was supposed to be here! I kept screaming in my head. The moon was high above the trees.  The weak moonlight covered the branches of the bare trees and gave them freaky shadows.  

I finally stopped to catch my breath. I couldn't take this. He was supposed to deliver the one thing that could keep her alive. I was sweating inside my heavy winter jacket and my ankle sock was sliding off my foot in my boot.  I didn't want to pull the boot off, for I feared I would get frost bite. I sucked in buckets of air and then let it escape through my nose, making clouds of visible air. 

After I had caught my breath, I began to jog again. Do it for Katie! I screamed in my head. I ran harder, being careful not to slip. I arrived at a clearing in the woods.  This was where we were supposed to meet. It was covered in snow now, but the snow was packed down by our footprints from previous times we had come here. When the snow didn't cover the ground, flowers would grow here.  Katie and I loved to come and pick flowers to make the house prettier. 

Something rustled behind me. I turned around and drew a sigh of relief. He had come. Towering over me, the man I had waited for stood in winter attire, holding a brown paper bag. He wore a white cap to cover his head and a scarf around his mouth and neck.  His jeans were tucked into his boots and his jacket was not zipped up all the way. 

"I have it." He announced, his voice giving away his southern heritage. 

"Thank God," I replied as I tramped over to him. "Hand it over."

"Do you have my payment?" He asked, his eyes tinkling darkly in the moonlight.

"Yes, of course I do." I dug deep into my pocket to find the bundle of money. My hard earned money. I fingered it for a moment, feeling the rubber band through my glove.  

"Let's go." The man said impatiently. I pulled it out. 

"50 dollars. There you go. Now will you please give it to me!" I pleaded. Katie could die any moment now. I didn't have time to talk with this man.

He pocketed the money and then pulled a syringe out of the paper bag. "What are you doing?" I demanded.

"I need to show you how to work it." He replied as he pulled his glove off. He walked toward me, his breath hitting my cold cheeks. "You-"

"Push the plunger down as I poke the skin with the needle. Yes, I know how to use these things." I answered. The man sighed.

"It's a shame that your sister is actually not getting the medicine." I stared at him with confusion. "Because this isn't even the medicine." My eyes widened with fear as he stabbed the needle through my jeans and into my leg and pushed the plunger.  The liquid shot into my leg. I shrieked. 

"What the hell!" I screamed at him, but my vision began to blur and I started to stumble. "Wha-" I blubbered before falling into the icy snow. The last thing i saw was the man standing over me with a devilish grin on his face.

Reviews

[dw817]

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Oww ... And I mean that literally as well as figuratively. You just can't trust strangers in the dark promising medicine. Next time, try your local Walgreen's ! :D

You have a unique writing style that really paints pictures in the mind. That's good as this is getting to be a hard-to-find attribute in many writers who unfortunately get caught up in the decision-making process that leads to more thoughts than actual things in the story.

Nicely written !

[London's Lily]

I like your writing style ~ very good imagery and detail! I was able to feel the scene, from the cold air to her breathless, frantic impatience. This is the first of your work that I've read so far - is this a short story that stands alone, or part of a work in progress? I'm looking forward to reading more of your work, which I definitely plan to do in the days to come! :)

[Nikki Congdon]

Thank you! I actually wrote this for a contest on here and after i posted it, I liked the idea and now i'm debating if i want to continue it. If you get a chance to read Flower, I just want to let you go that some things may not make sense right away because i'm changing some parts of the story line. When i'm done editing it on my word doc, I'll repost it here. Sorry if that's really confusing. Thanks for the review!