You were never mine to lose

Thought I'd post this, varies a little from previous things I've posted music wise (not that you'd know that, you can't hear it...)

Verse: Falling apart
As you walk by
Not a second glance can't look you in the eye
Just keep walking
Don't make the pain last
Leave me as i lower the flag to half mast

Pre-chorus: Hurts like a band aid
Ripped off when I see your
Smile that perfect grin used to make my day worth while
I'm sitting here alone
Trying to let it out
This feelings gonna make me black out

Chorus: All those memories that we made
A fresh sting An open wound
You pulled down my barricade
But you were never mine to lose
Now that you are gone
Do you want to hear the truth?
I don't know why I can't carry on, when
You were never mine to lose

Verse: Deeper and deeper
I sink my heart carries me down
Further and further till I hit the ground
Heavy like a rock
Pull me down to the bottom
Don't bother swimming up now that I've lost him

Pre-chorus:I can feel the heart ache
Every time I see your
Smile that perfect grin used to make my day worth while
Still not going numb
No way to let it out
This feelings gonna make me black out

Chorus: All those memories that we made
A fresh sting An open wound
You pulled down my barricade
But you were never mine to lose
Now that you are gone
Do you want to hear the truth?
I don't know why I can't carry on, when
You were never mine to lose

Bridge: As you walk away
I don't have the strength to shout
This feelings gonna make me black out

Chorus: All those memories that we made
A fresh sting An open wound
You pulled down my barricade
But you were never mine to lose
Now that you are gone
Do you want to hear the truth?
I don't know why I can't carry on, when
You were never mine to lose

Reviews

[benjammingham]

nice rhymes :)
id like to hink these are all about specific people...
i wis you would like singand post these on youtube case i can0 picture so may different ways this could be put into music....
I think its good. i dont know what you want to hear ,but the rhymes are good,it ha good content, nice structure, and the repetitiveness drills the topic in.
i like how yu used ythe word barriade. lol

[Nikki]

Haha yeah i'm thinking about posting on youtube im not sure yet though my voice kinda sucks :P and this one has a darker sound to it, bass drops and such... different than some of my others which are usually acoustic

[benjammingham]

so its likei knew you were trouble...kind of....lol....
you should post it even ifyu think it sucks. its about practice! be brave :)

[Nikki]

True haha I guess i'll think about it