Eternal Thirst

The hunger of a nightwalker

Masquerading in human flesh

I stalk you into the night

this exhilaration is unbearable

feed me

your innocence is luscious

life’s blood scalding

I consume you

and yet this eternal thirst

is never sated

I am damned 

     

 

Reviews

[Caradoc]

This is just my kind of piece. I love the title, when you dropped it in the piece itself, and the descriptions you use for the first person point of view. You have an excellent vampiric narrator here. You also get extra points for using the word "masquerading", as it connected my mind instantly to the genre defining work of White Wolf.

Another one to be added to my favorites.

Well done.

-Caradoc

[Nicole Williams]

I'm honored that you enjoyed my poem, this was one of my favorites to write. Thank you so much for you kind words and review.

[Caradoc]

You're very welcome. Thank you for sharing this with the WC community.

There is so much thirst in this one, really good Kora! really Vamp! beautiful title, it's neverending... it's forever... your sharp shortness in this piece is what I loved so much. It was like watching a good fragment of a movie. Thank you for penning this. Good work.

- Elisa

[Lucifer Jones]

Fierce and raw... It oozes yearning and angst... a sensual, angry frustration. The physical and emotional needs communicated so well. You paint a wonderful picture. So very nicely done.

[Lyn Anderson]

smart and sexy - why do you have posted you are horrible at poetry?

[I Am Svetlana]

This was interesting, I enjoyed it. Nighwalkers are always different and unexpected people, searching for a certain look or something in others. We all search for certain things in different people. Just depends on what we like...

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Sometimes we are consumed by our darkest desires....you have magnificently penned this thirst...

Well done, Kora!~xoxo~:)

[An owl on the moon]

Fiercely wild and alive in the shadowed places of the soul. Such a powerful, moving music in the night...

[Arthur Crow]

Love the passion and atmosphere this poem conjures.. your words are eternal!

[Stevo The POE-t]

Reading this piece and after I was done reading it... I actually had to read it again... That never happens to me often... So that means that I really liked this work of art... It's really dark and sounds like something I would have wrote... Kinda makes me wish I would have wrote it lol... :)

But the question is what did I get from this poem? To me it actually sounds like you wrote the poem about Ed Gein... If you know who he is... When he would kill his victims he would skin them... He would make skin suits out of them... He made a lampshade cover of Faces of people he had killed... He made a belt made of N*****s of women he had murdered... This killer that you wrote about sounds to me like they love to kill... They get a big thrill by murder... I can't wait to get to read more of your work... Keep it up missy...

[Sami Khalil]

We do have that eternal thirst for innocence and new bweginnings that is never sated ...Excellent...:)............