In My Nightmare

I can see them

watching and waiting

getting ready to pounce

I run but I’m not fast enough

can’t fight the monsters anymore

they overpower me and I’m helpless

I scream but no one hears me

it’s like a circle of pain

over and over and over again

they strip me of my pride

when they’re done with me

all that’s left is a broken puppet

a shell of a person

nothing but debris

Reviews

[Stevo The POE-t]

Once again girl a very well written poem... And once again my kind of poem... I love the dark side of poetry... Where we as writers can unleash the horror, the demons of hell... We as humans all possess monsters/demons... They hide in our closet at night just so people can't see how screwed up we really are... This is another one I really wish I would have written... I really love the line "All that's left is a broken puppet."

This is the type of poem that will send shivers right down your spine... But for so many of us this poem is true going back to what I said above... The demons that possess us become to strong to fight off after so long and you just let them become a part of you... And in the end I really do believe nothing is left of you but the shell of what you used to be... Can't wait to read more of your work...

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Wow, sounds like a bomb going off somehow. I had a terrifying nightmare myself like this, but I am not sure you mean an ACTUAL nightmare or not. In any event, this is very effective. The end makes it. I like that it is centered. The way it appears on the page matters in this case. So, may I ask, even if it is not necessarily something you may want to answer, what is this about?

[Stanley King]

An excellent piece that's full of truth! A true work of art.

[Lyn Anderson]

A dramatic write - well placed and well timed words give it a fast pace.

[I Am Svetlana]

Wow...I can really relate to every word in this piece! Through my struggle with depression, I have these feelings all too well. I feel so helpless when the silence at night surrounds and suffocates me. I can't help but let the voices in. I can't keep them out sometimes. You can't always keep the monsters away, some days, you have to let them in....begin to fight. We will win the fight one day, but each day will be a different battle. For me, this is how it is. If you ever need someone to talk to or anything, I'll be here to help join your in your battle. I'll be on your side, no matter how tough it may get.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Very dark.....and it fits so well in many other situations as well.
Well crafted, nicely depicted and overwhelming. Great work again!

[Caradoc]

This is dark and eerie enough that I would expect to see this in the Vampire: The Masquerade game book, or even as one of the pieces included in the World of Darkness main setting book.

It has a very Gothic horror vibe to it. The sense, the feeling, that something is hunting you. You cannot name it, you cannot describe what it looks, or where it is, but you know that it, that they, are coming for you. And in that, is an utter feeling of helpless despair. Because even though you run as fast and as hard as you can, though you look to hide, you can't stop them.

Definitely an intense nightmare scenario. I can honestly say I've had one myself a time or two. This piece made me shudder a bit.

Well written and well conveyed.

-Caradoc

[Nicole Williams]

Caradoc, you humble me with your words. I'm grateful you understand my brand of crazy, haha ^_^

[Caradoc]

You are very welcome. It was an enjoyable, if creepy, read. :)

[Blank_fortunes]

I didn't get to respond to this poem immediately because It inspired one for me and I wanted to thank you for your inspiration and your poem being able to add it to my library

[Nicole Williams]

I'm honored, thank you so much for your kind words ^__^

[Michelle N. H.]

The sense of fear is overwhelming through the person it haunts. Your words carry a terror I feel cannot be escaped, as if one were forever lost in the dark. It is wonderfully written.

[Nicole Williams]

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review ^_^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ending up "debris"

after the nightmare crash running from the demons...

running from ourselves...but eventually dreams catch up to us.

eerie piece...

jacob

[Nicole Williams]

Thank you so much Jacob!