night skys and your eyes

this is just another one

like the moons of venus, theres gravity between us ,
were all dreamers and singers ,
in the dark of night, well look into the light ,
of the starry night, the right site ,
i cant wait to lay out tonight ,
 brightly find the right words to say ,
no games to play, im gonna stare at the sky today,
 hoping the light will go away ,and the moon will stay ,
im gonna say, the night sky is better anyway ,
in space, the race for first place ,
theres no trace, of a way to get to this place,
except, for when i look into your face and see true loves embrace.

Reviews

[Steph]

i liked the flow of it and the rhyme scheme. the only thing i would suggest is capitolization and punctuation as well, meaning apostrophes in the there's and we're and i'm, this way words aren't misconstrued (like we're (we are) and were (wuhr), otherwise you did a good job.

~Steph