Dancers Last Dance

Just something i made up. I closed my eyes and started to type and this is what i came up with. Hope you like it:)

Her moves are what the world wants to see. 

 Dancing is what comes from the heart. 

Today her colors will shine,

Her vibrant colors will come alive.

Moving my feet across the room, 

Feeling the energy of a room once filled with sound. 

Dancing is a art form like harmony to music.

Like a dancer to the dance.

As the curtains open,

 The lights flash down on person center stage.

Like a thief of the night the dancer begins to steal your soul,

 Lead into a world unknown with just a prance.

The play consumes you waiting for you take the bait. 

The dancer knows how to make you move,

 Knows where to take your heart strings. 

Plays you like a puppet.

Her tension transfers through her body. 

She hypnotizes the crowd with her body.

Moves so simple yet so hard to learn.

She makes it look so easy.

Final curtain call,

The last show; The last time to see these moves. 

She wishes her dance could go on forever.

This is her last dance.

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I love this, Amanda. I used to dance when I was younger and I enjoyed it a lot. When I danced, I wanted to be the best at it as I possibly could be. There were dancers that inspired me and made me want to see more of their moves. When I was reading this, I was taken back to my younger years and how dancing once made me happy. I remember buying the costumes and almost slipping across the slick floors with my tap shoes. Such a fun experience! I love this line so much:

"Like a thief of the night the dancer begins to steal your soul," ---an allusion to the Bible. I caught onto it quite fast. I love that.

Every true dancer wish that their dance last forever. Excellent.

[Hatchling]

nicely written

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Amazing use of alliterations, anaphoras and metaphors, enjoyable with its narrative way of "storytelling".
Great job, especially considering it came out from nothing ! One thing I'm sure: You'll never suffer for writer's block :)

[Morrigan Nicole]

A delicate work, beautiful job!

[Ink Angel]

Beautiful, such an amazing flow , imagery is very alive. Welldone!

[dan nacario]

wonderful with great and powerful lines.great.

[EMMIE]

This makes me think. It's absolutely amazing!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

very thought-provoking and suspenseful last line, after all those previous intense verses

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Poignant and powerful. The last line raises all sorts of questions. Beautiful poetry as usual, Amanda!

[SeventhSin]

Love it! :) Great job