Intertwined

Just something i wanted to try out. Love or Hate?

He comes out of the shower soaking wet 

Muscles gleaming from the hot water

He makes his way over to the bed 

Showing off every  morsel as he walks 

Climbing onto the bed ever so gently

Slowly making himself comfortable 

He leans down kisses her lips

Putting love in every second

Moving down  softly to her neck

Letting out a little sound of bliss

Continuing down he makes his presence known

Hitting all the right spots to ensure total joy

Two  spirits bonding together as one

The  ecstasy of both bodies joining becomes pure delight

Seeing that his princess was at the higest thrill 

He charmed her with his end of the rainbow looking treasure

She shows him her feminine wiles 

Giving him a pleasure beyond his wildest dreams

Like an artist beginning thier painting 

Together they are the world of art on the canvas.

Leaving no stone unturned or sound unheard 

They both finished with esteem of each others love

They shared a love that is unique to them 

Finding delight, beauty and happiness in being together

Reviews

[Ink Angel]

Very nice, love the 5th stanza, hot stuff lol. No, seriously well written.

[devon]

I'm not big on "erotic" poems, but you wrote this quite beautifully without making it sound dirty!

Hahaha, and I actually enjoyed this poem. :)

[外人 (Gaiji..]

It's amazing how you created a beautiful poem for our eyes, we got used to "prefer" this sense to the others and that is reflected in our poetry, but no one gives so much attention to this sense, you literally create a "triumph of the sight" in your best poems :)
PS: I'm glad you "censured" the act in such sophisticated words in verses 3-4 of stanza 3 :)

[Coyote Poetry]

When two people enjoy each other. Only good things can happen. I like the flow of desire and the positive ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Luciole]

This is great! So beautiful and loving :D

[Starr Mist]

This is so pretty! It's to good for words... it's amazing. Life is cruel... why can't every girl have a guy like that? It's not fair! :)

Thanks for posting, as all ways and happy writing!

Starr

[SeventhSin]

This is truly beautiful and is inspirating. :)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

i enjoyed reading this...really impressive work bringing out the feeling of sensuality (since you stated it's your first time writing somethings like this)

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

I think this is beautiful! It's deeply romantic without being awkward or erotic. Thumbs up!