Disease

Let me know what you think. Just something I made up.

Needing you is like a disease,

The more and more I have you, the weaker I get.

No matter how hard I try to get rid of you

You keep coming back.

 

Harder and harder to leave

Needing become wanting.

Wanting can lead to danger.

Are you worth the risk?

 

This disorder becomes overwhelming.

Taking over with it's infection.

Starting at my head and working its way down.

Reaching every inch until it totally consumes me.

 

I am contaminated with your every cell.

Poisoned by your every fiber.

It's festering inside of my soul, just waiting to be released.

I am now fully tainted.

 

On the floor weak from you

You tell me I am worth nothing,

You say you will never be anything more than mine,

You mean nothing to me.

 

You are filthy piece of garbage,

You are lower than dirt,

No man is ever going to want you,

You are almost not worth keeping around.

 

You are just a disease

You need me

You want me

I own you.

 

I sit and cry and wonder,

Why haven't I left?

I am really worth nothing?

I am just a disease?

 

 

Reviews

[Jay]

This is such a great poem. I could really feel that raw heartbreak. Nice work!

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Well, that's definitely an original metaphor, even though it looks a little sad and pessimistic, you are not woth nothing !! You are special, never forget !

[Jay. E. V.]

The use of disease ridden words and sickness is a great comparison to this kind of relationship=) I love it, and believe it or not, I've dealt with things similar to that. Very touching, appeals to a wide variety of readers and I can feel the power behind it. Excellent=)

[Lily Mae]

You always are so good at hitting those heart strings that are raw and powerful.. We sometimes give so much to others we lose our personal power.. And of course you are worth everything..but sometimes people just feed off the great energy we have within ourselves ...and we let them..leaving us feeling empty and alone...xo

[dan nacario]

so much emotion and depth..great write

[Ripple of Aqua]

This was very overwhelming, in a good sense, and the metaphor of a disease is great. It was very thought churning.

[Thea]

There's so much overflowing emotions in this poem and I really loved how you expressed them all...A nice write! Keep it up!
:)))

[R.A. Youngblood]

I like your metaphors and you expressed your feelings very well, yes, your poem is very emotional, sad yet powerful! I really like it!
I specially like that asking rhythm at the ending..
Thanks for sharing..Well done :D

[Ink Angel]

Such emtion, such sadness, this poem is heartfelt. Its got a toxic feel to the whole relationship he s draining her, controlling her every breath. Thankyou for sharing this wonderful piece of poetry.

[Starr Mist]

I like it, a woman shouldn't be treated like this ever. A woman is beautiful, but in reality, verbally abusive relationships are like this unfortunately. Very good. I have some things that may help with flow, should you choose to accept them.

1) second line after you, me personally, I would but a comma there.
2) same right after sould in line 15.

Very good! I loved it, good word choice!