Wave of Murder

someone doesn't make it out alive

As you lay fighting for your life

You scream your plight

Trying to get away with all your might

There was going to be a murder tonight.

Your captor has many plans for you

He told you; you would be his slave

No clothes, No  way to get out, No way to stop him

You felt your body go limp.

He ties you to his bed

chains and ropes bound your hands and feet

He gets on top of you as though you are his treat

For this deadly fate he must meet

As time goes by he becomes rougher 

You can't imagine a worse kind of torture

As he forced you to say dirty things

He forced you to participate in this filthy games

He was finally done with you

You sighed in relief 

But all was not over you soon realized 

He pulled out a whip

You screamed 

"Please stop or just go ahead and kill me"

He responded 

"It wouldn't be any fun for me"

You just had enough you had to get out of there

But how? How do you get away when you're tied up?

You wait for him to leave the room

You try to slip out of the ropes

You get one hand out and work on the other one fast

Next your legs and you are now free

You must act quickly though

You find a knife you see

Running in the next room 

You come at him with a powerful zoom

Cut deep into his throat 

Watching all his blood float

With the wave of your hand

You wrote in this chest

A message in this man

"MURDER"

The wicked witch is dead

You survived with all the hairs on your head.

Finally your captor is dead

Author's Note

Okay I fixed all the errors :) so tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Cathy Wattam]

Wow! Quite an intense little story here. Easy to read but not an easy subject. I think this is very good.

There are some errors however:-
"There was going to a murder tonight" - missed the word "be"
"No away to stop him" - should say "No way to stop him"
"How do you get away when your tied up?" - should say "you're"
"you must act quick you though" - perhaps should be "you must act quickly though"

I think that aout covers it. Can't help proofreading as I go along. It is a good poem though. Keep going, I really admire people taking on the difficult subjects. Well done.

[The White Wolf]

Ouch, this was very intense! This is always such a hard subject to write about but you did it rather well. Very nice job on keeping with the flow of the piece and creating a good plot line.

[Sophie]

This was utterly amazing! I loved it, this was a great read. Well done!

[Thea]

Agree with SuicidePact! This was totally an epic piece! This was really interesting...So breathtaking! You did a great job here!
:)))

[SuicidePact.]

holey moley this was epic!

you chose spectacular words to bring your writing to life! this was really great!

i'm going to send it to my friends!

[Coyote Poetry]

Wow Amanda. You took me on a wild ride in this poem. I like the pace and the description of this story. The tension got stronger with each added line and I like the way you ended this story. Thank you for sharing the excellent story.
Coyote

[Bryan Micheni]

i really like the allegory in this, how this applies to anything, not just being kidnapped and used as a sex slave:) really good write.