Cut Deep

Just something I thought of. I am in no way condoning cutting or harming yourself in anyway. This was just something I made up. I hope you like it.

Cuts all down your arm,

Feeling no pain as blood drips.

Wanting everything to go away.

Nothing else really matters.

Cuts so deep,

Blood runs out; 

Like a water down the river.

Cuts go so deep.

Laying there waiting to see the light;

Yet, darkness is coming fast.

Trying to remember the last time you want to be alive.

Trying to think of anything to help you cope.

Only moments pass by;

Yet, It feels like eternity.

No one has come looking.

Does anyone really care?

Cuts and bruises line your arm.

Darkness and Sadness line your heart.

Nothing else matters.

Exit light, enter night.   

As the final drop of blood leaves,

You finally feel at peace with the world.

Your soul is cleansed from the darkness.

All your cuts and bruises are no more.

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

ok first of all, amazing identification =D Your poem is deep and full of pathos, i haven't read such a good poem for ages !! Loved the antithesis you've put in your poem: the combination of the pairs everything-nothing (2-3 vv), light-darkness (9-10 vv), moments-eternity (13-14vv), no one-anyone (15-16 vv), exit-enter (20 vv) are incredibly appealing, amazing poem, amazing job =D

[Lokesh]

A painful poem.

[dan nacario]

amazing...full of emotion..great job..

[BikerAngie]

Excellent write you captured the cutters feelings very well indeed. Most cutters are looking for a way to get rid of the internal hurt and pain trying to feel alive once more. A lot of people do not understand what drives a cutter. It can stem from a deep hurt or a feeling of wanting to bleed out the bad they feel is in them. It is not attention seeking behavior as so many seem to think in fact quite the contrary it is about the release of emotions without confiding in others. I do understand, I once was a cutter. This hit deep to home Praise God I never got to deep into it and for me it was but a very brief very small phase of my teen years.

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

This poem is full of deep emotion. The pain just emanates from your words. Excellent job.

[Angelic Surrender]

I know the feeling. Great work. I like this one a lot. It's very deep and full of passion. Pain is worse when no one cares.

[Sunflower]

wonderful poem, self harm is a very touchy subject and you wrote of it very well. good write

[ღ.яαg..]

Great poem!!! I like the way you grouped things into stanzas. I need to work on that, I think... But you did a good job ;D