Blood

just something i made up when i couldnt sleep

Dripping down

No where to turn

You start to fall

Lost all hope

 

Finding blood

Feeling it between your hands

Hot and sticky

Wrapped around your skin

 

Heart racing; pumping more

Slowly losing sight

Wishing it all away

 

The pain that flows

Veins popping loud

You wonder why?

Tears run down your face

 

Stabbing you in the back

Hurts more from a friend

So beware or you'll be seeing blood.....

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem. I like the description and the story in your words.
"Finding blood
Feeling it between your hands
Hot and sticky
Wrapped around your skin"
Last statement is true. When friends stab us. Hard to understand. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Jessalynn]

Great read, very bold poem I enjoyed it.

[Slow Leak]

I'm into this, love the visuals

[Jessica Samuelsen]

getting intense my friend... I am excited to see you exploring fullness of emotions in your writing.

[Kiri Nells]

Ouch, that one hurt...
Good write!

[Calypso]

Well described.

[JanuaryDreamer♥]

very nice poem :) this poem really was awesome and had cool/good details all throughout :] cant wait to read more!

[trainwreck]

Very good and painful write. Excellent job.