Ice Cold Eyes

A Poem by MandaBear

inspired by a poem I saw on here.

You look at me and say I caused your pain

Like I’m the only reason you’re still alive

You look at me with such cold eyes

Don’t make me the reason you want to die

Even the sight of me makes you sick

I’m the disease that infected you

My very existence needs to be erased

You look at me with such cold eyes

© 2016 MandaBear

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SmittyJas

Deep scars are written here for all to see in need of repair your friend my need a face lift to erase the gloom and not feel the doomed of the brokenness that may be. Best wishes to both.

Posted 8 Years Ago

I Am Svetlana

A very powerful saying and meaning behind this. I can't relate to this, but my ex can cause the girl he just broke up with tried to kill herself, so now she's I'm a mental hospital. They were together about a year and three months, which totally blows if you end it cause being the girl, you feel like it didn't mean anything.

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you. Wow I can''t imagine what it would be like to be in that situation. That would be very ha.. read more

devon

Very interesting style of writing. Very straightforward and concrete, and very little to no use of imagery or abstract metaphors to get your point across. Sometimes it is refreshing to see a poetic voice that refuses to "beat around the bush". I like the repetition of "you look at me with such cold eyes".

Nice poem! I look forward to seeing more from you, and it will be interesting to see you continue to grow as a writer.

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I was inspired by another poets poem on here called Cold Eyes. Thank you for the .. read more

Greg Agee

I really like your style and I see much promise. Maybe it's me. The duality r represented in reason fire being and reason to die is a nice twist

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the kind review =)

Gregory Lara

Sounds like you hurt a love one and know your mistakes caused them their pain...we always want to right our wrongs...great piece!

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it =)

Inject Positivity

Mysterious.....The descriptions of the effects of seeing those cold eyes are very dreamy to read, speaks as if they are placed in a cold world.....Wow!!! Manda you are awesome.....Loving it......100 ratings.....