Blow my candle out

Sometimes.....people feel like this

It's about time to blow the candle out 

No more light just pure darkness 

The ray of happy drowned in sorrow 

I shall not be a burden anymore 

Leaving you with what's left of my love 

Giving up my soul for emptiness 

Looking at the mirror reflecting lackluster skin 

The vacant slot of my existence

Like a whisper in the wind 

I shall float away 

Like the shadows in the dark 

I shall blend into my surroundings 

It's about time to blow the candle out 

No more light just pure darkness 

Shall not be a burden anymore 

I shall be out of your way forever 

Like the snowflake of the winters snow 

I shall melt into the ground 

Like a freshly lit birthday candle 

I shall blow my candle out  

Reviews

[ron]

I know how this feel Manda. You will never be like the candle blown out, your light burns bright and full of life. You have passion.

[MandaBear]

Thank you. I just thought of this while watching Youtube lol crazy huh??

[ron]

No its not crazy. I think we feel like this some times.

[MandaBear]

Question are we sharing our project on here? Just curious I am fine with it if you are.

[ron]

That is up to you Manda.

[MandaBear]

Like I said its fine with me if its fine with you

[ron]

Its fine with me Manda...:)

[Akashi]

Your poetry are eye-catchers. I must put this in my FAVORITES.

[MandaBear]

Thank you so much :) I am glad you liked it

[Akashi]

You're welcome. ;)

[Michael G. Smith]

You've definitely captured the emotional turmoil of one who feels they are a worthless soul. I hope to read part two when they began to love there self enough to know that we make our own happiness and they then embrace it. Even though you write with talent these type of themed poems are hard to read when one was once in this situation.

[I Am Svetlana]

I can really relate to this piece and it was beautifully planned out as well as well as penned! My best friend was planning to end his life last December, after having his relationship go downhill cause the girl had no respect for him and treated him like he was nothing to her, also due to a certain ticket he had to pay in which he knew he didn't have the money for. He called me one night and confessed that if he couldn't come up with the money by the certain time, he claimed he was t going back to jail. I then asked him what he was going to do and he said he was going to kill himself somehow. I became very scared because he is like a brother to me and we have been through so much, I didn't want to lose him. He felt like he was such a bother and a problem to everyone that he felt everyone would be happier with him gone, more of less, he felt they wouldn't even bother or worry that he would be gone. He told me I was going to be the first person he would call if he were to kill himself, if ever. I checked the obituary section in the paper nearly everyday, just in case. He hasn't done it, the meaning behind this just reminded me of this and told me to share it.

[Lily Mae]

This really impacts me. A friend of mine just tried killing himself because he didn't want to be a burden anymore. Sad part is.. he's not a burden to me, but more my shining light. I wish people could see what we see in them.. A very deep write Amanda.. well done..xo

[Jamie Cook]

ooooooo gurl! Simple and sweet yet so much more then there is to the eye. I loved this Mandabear!! Awesome job woot woot! LOVE YOU!!! :D

[Rick Puetter]

Dear MandaBear,

This was nicely written. Clear. Simple. Easy to understand. Well structured lines with natural breaks. Easy to digest and take into one's heart.

Greatly enjoyed. Powerful sentiment. High marks.

My very best regards,

Rick

[RainDancer1997]

So many people feel like this. Sometimes even do honestly. Life sucks sometimes, but its a beautiful thing. Great job!!

[eatme]

I thought it was a tribute to Conrad.
I think of him when people say it is time to leave a cabin or blow out a candle.

[dw817]

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I - HOPE this is not a cry for help, albeit suicide. That is certainly what I read into this, Amanda.
I suppose another interpretation would be that you are breaking up with someone. And - it's funny. There is no way to represent two lines beside each other without a bridge to hold them up.

Love is a bit like that. There will always be support from somewhere, to hold the love together. Whether you offer it or he does, when one does not support the other, =BOTH= fall down.

Something to consider. And as I suggested to one person, if they will not listen to you, perhaps write them. Sometimes it's easier to pour out our heart on paper than to be on the spot and do it directly to them.

Best wishes on your endeavor in any case ...

[MandaBear]

Well to ease your mind it's nothing about suicide. I just got inspiration from some of the crime shows I have been watching and this came to mind =)

[dw817]

Good to know you're not depressed or anything. Very good ! :D

I've been watching Perry Mason myself at night. I recently put together a DVD that plays 15 episodes at 53-minutes apiece. Wow, I didn't think you could stuff that much on a DVD and still have it play properly with a menu and everything. *Grin*

Guess it goes to show most DVDs you buy today really aren't filled up all the way.
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