Done (Tanka #7)

A guy breaking up with a girl Tanka #7 Let me know what you think

       

 My heart is broken down

 Oh, so much for my happy ending

 It wasn't whole before

 I have several words for you

 We are so over, I am done

Reviews

[dw817]

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Forgive me for being The Oblivious Pizza Delivery Guy, but I have to ask - and I have wondered. If you loved someone, how can you so intensely hate them now more than if they were a stranger ?

Does this make any logical sense what I am asking ?

[Krista Weiss]

Gosh. How do you read my mind and write exactly what it says?? Great job!!

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well with the Tanka. I like the directness of the statements. Sometime we release the dead weight. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[RainDancer1997]

Getting tired of being thrown around by someone you possibly love. It's very emotional and realistic. Great job:)

[MandaBear]

Thank you very much!

[Keith LaFountaine]

Lot's of emotion. Nice work!

[MandaBear]

Thank you =)

[Akashi]

So hard and cold. I LOVE IT!

[MandaBear]

Thank you I am glad you liked it. I am trying a new style =)

[Akashi]

Good! You are welcome.