Losing my fall colors (Tanka #1)

This is my first attempt at a Tanka poem. What do you think?

                                                                                                         

Falling leaves removed 

"I can fall on my own"

Big tree can't let go

Winter coming , snow too

Time rolling by, seasons 

Author's Note

Definition of a Tanka Poem- a Japanese poem consisting of 31 syllables in 5 lines, with 5 syllables in the first and third lines and 7 in the others.

Reviews

[wordwarrior]

Such a lovely Tanka and I think you did great for your first! I haven't written these before but you have packed such a lot of images in these few lines and words.
That connection with the seasons and time is crucial to understanding life....Big tree can't let go...my favourite line!
Love this!

[MandaBear]

Thank you for such a lovely review :)

[dw817]

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While a single leaf can certainly break and fall, it takes all the leaves of a tree for one to recognize Fall. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well. Complete poem in so few words. I'm sad to see the leaves go away and Winter coming soon. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote