Addicted

Addicted

A Poem by MandaBear
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In the eyes of someone that uses drugs. I dont do drugs and I hope no one does them they can be harmful and deadly if used improperly. Anyway, enough of my rant Enjoy the Poem!! Please Review Thanks!

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Needles, syringes, and pipes galore.
My body still wants more.
Drugs to go into my blood stream 
Together we will work as a euphoric team.

Getting as high as the sky and higher still
Should I take the Crack or the pill?
My body still wanting more 
To which I say wait until you see whats in store.

Heroin trips down memory lane.
My brain is no longer in pain.
LSD gee what you think?
I just saw my life in a blink.

Ecstasy let take you for a ride.
You make me feel so happy inside.
Opium it's now your turn. 
For you my heart burns.

Now my body is full of fun. 
I see things more clearly and strong if you will.
It's just a waiting game to see which one will kill.
My body is playing with a smoking gun.

To all you shooters, boozers and users
Is it really worth it for a one time high?
Makes you look like a bunch of losers.
The next time you get high you might have to say bye bye.

© 2013 MandaBear


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I like your tone- it realistically captures how an addict would feel about all of his substances

Posted 11 Years Ago


Really glad that I was able to read this! My friend just over dosed the other day :/ It wasn't that bad, but it was definitely very scary for me. I still don't know exactly what happened or what to believe. Thanks for put this up!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


MandaBear

11 Years Ago

I am sorry about your friend that must have been awful. I am here for you if you need it. I am glad .. read more
Krista Weiss

11 Years Ago

Thank you! And thanks for putting this up! :)
Great job Amanda. You have great rhythm and imagery in this piece. The only suggestion I have is:

The final stanza seems a bit out of place. In your previous stanzas your character glorifies drug use (even if said character knows the dangers of drug use), and in the final stanza it switches to a more critical view of drugs. Also, you write the previous stanzas in first person, and then switch to second person in the final stanza. It's just a strange switch, and I would choose one or the other and stick with it for the entire piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Excellent write Amanda. You really penned the true emotion very well..xo

Posted 11 Years Ago


I lost two brother to drugs. Drugs are powerful. They will take control and leave you barren. I tried to help my brothers. Drugs are like a Demon possession. One you are in. You can't get out. I like your description. I tell the young and old folks. Dance with the Devil. Devil rarely loses. Great wisdom can be learn from your words. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


Drugs for me is a hard topic. I have met some ex drug users who told me just how messed up their lives were after drugs and it took them several years to get them off them and help from people. It is a tough topic for them to read about and they wish they could change it.

A good, tough write. It was really powerful.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on May 15, 2013
Last Updated on June 27, 2013
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