I loved her so much I killed her

Multi-personality. I kinda thought of someone talking to themselves after they killed someone. Let me know what you think.

Blood running through your fingers and making me have to feel bad for you. 

Something that I physically can't do,

Morally I wont do it.

You brought this one your self. 

What do you have to say for your self now? 

You stabbed me in the back and now I stabbed you in the heart where I hurt the most. 

You think you don't deserve the treatment that you got, 

I don't think so you are a piece of....

Well, I shouldn't that say that but what do you expect.

You dont want to hear it yet I am going to talk about .

You knew I wanted her and you took her from me. 

You killed her, you took the only one that was the angel in my life,

 Sent her to heaven before her time.

She was the best thing to ever happen to me. 

She was the light in my day and the darkness in my night. 

She was about to take my name. 

I hope your happy with yourself.

Those perfect blue eyes, brown hair and wonderful personality are lost.

I think to myself what have you done?

I look in the mirror and saw a man covered in blood and realized...

I had killed her. 

My one true angel and now she's gone.

Now I am dying too. My good side fighting my bad side.

My bad side won.

I loved her so much that I killed her.

 

Author's Note

Let me know what you think!

Reviews

[Morrigan Nicole]

well, i must say that this was a little difficult to read. i twas a little more like a rant, if you will, than poetry. thats the only way i know how to put it... i would say, childish, but thats not quite the case either. it is, however, very unique and if i must say..... pretty good. :)
although i dont care much for how it was written and worded, the way in which you did so, just PERFECTLY captured the speakers frame of mind, and how they are a little bit insane, for the lack of a better word. the speaker was very blunt about their words and actions, and displayed them very well in this case. also, they seem very hurt and scarred, but at the same time, they have an attitude as if they are already over that person who caused them so much pain and suffering. and they dealt with this in a way they believed to be correct.
i really liked the ending, and the very strange style/format. nice dialect as well.

[Charisma Moonfairy]

Wow that is very intense, I loved the way that it was written and the way that it flowed, perfect job

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

I agree with Morrigan completely. It was a little confusing, but still, really unique, and I believe that that is a good thing. I think the confusion wasn't so much confusion, as it was you trying to display the insanity of the man.. Talking about how someone else had killed the girl, and then at the end of the poem, realization hits, he looks in the mirror and realizes that he's covered in her blood.. that he was the one who killed her.. Most of the poem, it's a battle between, as you said, his good side and his bad side. He's arguing with himself.. and then he realizes that his good side lost, his bad side won, and he lost the love of his life.. Really beautiful job with this, Amanda.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad ending to the poem. To kill the person you love. Leave you in a bad situation. A very scary story in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Krista Weiss]

Wow! Great poem! Prettyyyy creepy! :P

[dan nacario]

A very wonderfully written poem...unique ,dark and cold ..great write..

[Melody Telleria]

Very dark and wonderfully disturbing. I felt chills. It amazes me to think that these amazing pieces I read, such as this one, is inspired by true life. What has happened to humans? We are a lost civilation.

[MandaBear]

thank you!