What My Brown Eyes See

I knew in my heart I found my soul mate. I know we as girls say that a lot. By the way this is NOT about Johnny Depp. (Shocking I know)

My heart flutters every time I think of you. 

Your voice is like angels in a chorus. 

I can't say enough good things about you.

When I first saw you my heart just knew.

My soul practically lights up when your name is said.

When I close my eyes your what I see.

I hope you don't think I am creepy.

It was like God said he's your one.

The first concert I saw you, we were the only ones in the room.

Watching you on stage was magical.

Sweat rolling down your face and chest.

Oh, how I wanted that shirt.

Even as I try to write this poem my mind wonders.

Listening to you on CD.

Imagining your lips singing every song.

My heart just melts.

I know you are not perfect,but neither am I.

Maybe it's just a crush or just a silly infatuation.

Maybe our paths will cross again.

Until then my love......

My brown eyes will be waiting to see you.

Reviews

[Erinne S.]

I liked this! You could definitely sense your passion towards this person.

"I know you are not perfect but neither I am." You need to switch the words 'I' and 'am' around. Also, add a comma before the word 'but', so it reads... "I know you are not perfect, but neither am I"
Other then that line, everything about this poem was fantastic! Well done :)

~Erinne

[MandaBear]

Thank you I fixed it :). I am glad you liked it

[Erinne S.]

You are welcome! It was a very easy fix!

[XxYoung.WriterxX]

this is really good

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Good to express like and desire. Never know the truth if we do not try. I like the use of the eyes. The eyes can open or close doors. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Awwwh, this is soo sweet and cute. I love seeing other people falling in love and have their happy endings! One day I'll get that too for helping others with their relationship both positiveness and downfalls. I like how you tell the story on how you met your soulmate, or your match from Heaven. Did you ever talk to him though? See, I'm shy. I wouldn't of said anything just stood there and smiled and blushed a little bit. It's cool and unique that you met him at a concert and he was onstage singing, too! Congrats, Amanda for a beautiful poem and soon to be relationship! :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG ;)

[MandaBear]

Its funny you say that. I did talk to him for a second. He's from a band called Kingsfoil. I just got a picture with him. Believe me I think he's amazing I wish I could have a relationship with him! Maybe one day I will! Gotta Dream big right? Lol Thank you for the review! So sweet as always!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're welcome, and that's really cool though. Dream BIG and you'll win BIG ;) don't forget that, Amanda.

[MandaBear]

I wont! Dont your forget it either!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I won't try to :)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

i love how the details make this poem come to life! (esp. the 3rd and 4th stanzas)

[Krista Weiss]

Awww really cute!!! Great job! :)

[MandaBear]

thank you!

[trainwreck]

This is pretty cool. I like it quite a bit. I'm curious who this is about. Good write!

[devon]

I like it!

It's cheesy, but only in the best way! It's cute and innocent and sweet, and has all the makings of a lovely little love poem.

:)