Morning Mind

A lonely vibration wakes me from my slumber,

And grants me wicked whims to wonder,

Like abandoned ships I beg to plunder,

It turns me over,

It turns me under,

My manic joy is cast asunder.

That thoughtless thief’s thrown storms of thunder

What tomorrow sees for you and me,

Taken from these thoughts I breed,

And for the love of god and greed,

I long to leave you loved indeed,

But memories have long decreed,

You better off in the arms of he.

So leave my love

And leave my need,

And leave my mourning mind to me.

Author's Note

its a bit sad but when it hits you, it hits you I guess. Plus I pretty much dig it. What do you think?

Reviews

[floarealbastra10]

great poem

[Kat24]

hi,
this is very good. i like the way you write this. kat24

It's very catchy.

"It turns me over,
It turns me under"
I very much like the simplicity of those two lines. but they're in depth too.

[r]

I really loved this poem. It just amazing. :)

[Forever Mine]

This was very well written. This is one of my favorite poems taht ive read on here.

[FocusedAmnesia]

You can definitely tell that music has a huge influence on you. Your poem read like a song, and it didn't seem like you tried hard to rhyme. Amazing write.
"You['re?] better off in the arms of he."

[x]

I like this, it's brief and too the point. Speaks of another stealing your gal but are you sure..
Very well written, loved reading it and made this reader think about things.

The language is great. I really like the rhyme too. That's a bit depressing at the end. Did you mean "You're better off in the arms of he"?

[.]

touching and sad, but well penned..

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

reads like a song~ well constructed rhyme scheme~ flows smooth down the page~
strong topic well presented~